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The article was promoted by GrahamColm 10:01, 2 May 2013 (UTC) [1].[reply]

SMS Prinzregent Luitpold edit

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Nominator(s): Parsecboy (talk) 20:07, 19 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Another one of my German battleships - this is the last member of the Kaiser class to grace the illustrious FAC page, so hopefully she can join her sister ships and advance another step toward turning the GT into an FT. I wrote this article a couple of years ago, it passed GA in January 2011, and a MILHIST ACR in August last year - hopefully not too much dust has gathered while it's waited for me to have the free time to put it up for FAC. I look forward to working with reviewers in ensuring this article meets the criteria for Wikipedia's best work. Thanks in advance to all who take the time to review the article. Parsecboy (talk) 20:07, 19 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Support on prose per standard disclaimer. I've looked at the changes made since I reviewed this for A-class. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 23:32, 20 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments

  • Link diesel engine, steam turbine, turret, Amrun Bank, Behncke
  • Having the description after the construction, and before the service history is a bit jarring to me. Wouldn't moving the construction section into the service history make it flow better?
  • Move horsepower and boilers to installed power line in infobox. Why are the types of armor bolded? They should all probably be linked.
  • This is awkward: Admiral Friedrich von Ingenohl, the commander of the High Seas Fleet. Admiral von Ingenohl
  • Tell the reader what type of ship Blücher was.
  • What make sure to add states to publisher locations. What country are Oxford and Barnsley in?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 02:00, 21 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    • Should all be taken care of, thanks Sturm. Parsecboy (talk) 22:55, 21 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Source review - spotchecks not done

  • Be consistent in whether page ranges are abbreviated
  • Gröner: is this a translated work or is it German-language? Nikkimaria (talk) 17:23, 22 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    • Ed fixed the page ranges, and yes, Gröner is a translated work. Parsecboy (talk) 21:44, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments from Ealdgyth (talk · contribs)

  • Lead:
    • "commissioned into the fleet" - I presume the German High Seas Fleet? Can we linkie? Oh, I see we link in the next paragraph, any reason why? Could we say "navy" instead?
      • "navy" sounds fine to me.
  • Construction:
    • "instead, three of the five turrets were mounted on the centerline, with two of them arranged in a superfiring pair aft" ... confused here - is that two of the three or the OTHER two that are left after the three mounted on the centerline? I gather from the next sentence that it's the first option, but a bit more clarity might help here.
      • Does specifying the location of the 3rd centerline turret make it clearer?
    • "torpedo tubes, all mounted in the hull." forward, midships, aft? Or spread out?
      • Should be clarified now.
  • Service history:
    • "The ship again went..." But we haven't said it went to Kiel Week before this..
      • Must have been a typo - good catch.
    • Linkage for "sortie"?
    • "portions of the Grand Fleet" - I presume the Grand Fleet was British? Linkage? Oh, wait, you link it a bit further down, should be at first mention.
      • Fixed.
  • Battle of Jutland:
    • "under the command of David Beatty." Surely he was an admiral of some sort, shouldn't he get his rank given like the Germans have been?
      • Added.
    • "In the course of the battle, Prinzregent Luitpold fired one-hundred and sixty-nine 30.5 cm shells and one-hundred and six 15 cm rounds." Any reason you used ordinals here instead of numerals?
      • I was under the impression that using two sets of numerals was bad practice (since 169 30.5 cm could be somewhat hard to read, for instance).
        • Works for me. I was more curious than anything else... Ealdgyth - Talk 21:56, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Fate:
    • "and their crews were reduced to 200 officers and men." Is that per ship? I'm pretty sure it can't be for the entire fleet...
      • Yeah, per ship - clarified now.
  • Looks very good, just a few spots where I was unsure of some stuff. Be happy to support when these are taken care of. Ealdgyth - Talk 18:42, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    • Thanks, Ealdgyth, your reviews are always spot on. Parsecboy (talk) 21:44, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
      • Happy to support on prose and comprehensibility to the non-military person. Ealdgyth - Talk 21:56, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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