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The article was archived by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 05:29, 14 February 2015 (UTC) [1].[reply]

One Son

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Nominator(s): Gen. Quon (Talk) 20:12, 25 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

This is the twelfth episode of the sixth season of the American sci-fi series The X-Files. It features the end of the long-running arc about the shadowy Syndicate, and was quite an important episode for the series. This article was promoted to GA in 2010 (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:One_Son/GA1), and since my first edit back in 2011, it has substantially been revised, expanded, and reorganized ([2]). Furthermore, it has been copy-edited by Beth.Snyder6 ([3]), JudyCS ([4]), and I've made sure to go through it every now and then and clean up anything that I think is awkward. I think it looks quite good, and I believe it is ready for the next step.--20:12, 25 January 2015 (UTC)Gen. Quon (Talk)

Lede comments
  • '"One Son" is the twelfth episode of the sixth season of the American science fiction television' - the double use of "of" was somewhat jarring to me. Firt "of" could be replaced with "from"
  • I believe the first sentence could be split at the comma: "The episode first aired".
  • Why repeat the name of the episode in the second sentence? It could easily be replaced with "It", the antecedent has been sufficiently established.
  • "The episode was well received by critics, who applauded the way the Syndicate's story arc was wrapped up, although others felt the resolution was too simplistic." - I'm a fan of sequential plots. Shouldn't this be at the end of the lede. The critics (or atleast most critics) didn't announce their thoughts on the episode until after it aired.
  • 'who work on cases linked to the paranormal called "X-Files".' this seemed jarring to me. Perhaps, 'who work on cases called "X Files"—those deemed "unsolvable" by the FBI, usually dealing with the paranormal.' or something similar.
  • "her ex-husband the Smoking Man (William B. Davis)" should be "her ex-husband, the Smoking Man (William B. Davis),"
  • "the alien conspiracy" - which alien conspiracy? this one? (The cuteness is to say this: could be clarified)
    It's Wikilinked. I feel it would take up waaaaaayy too much space to expand it fully, but I did add "...to take over the Earth".--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:15, 6 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • The caption in the infobox: "Episode co-writer Frank Spotnitz cited this visual effect as one that did not please him." This is irrelevant. You can either remove it or put it in a note. --ceradon (talk • contribs) 23:52, 5 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    Ehh, I don't think it's irrelevant. I'm trying to explain to the reader why the image is important; I'm trying to cover it's "Purpose of Use".--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:15, 6 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Closing comment -- sorry but after three weeks we're a long way off from achieving sufficient commentary to declare a consensus for promotion, so I'll be archiving this shortly. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 05:29, 14 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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