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- Nominator(s): ๐ฎ๐ช๐ค๐ฉ๐ข๐ฆ๐ญ'๐ด ๐ฅ๐ฆ๐ข๐ณ ๐ฎ๐ฆ๐ญ๐ข๐ฏ๐ค๐ฉ๐ฐ๐ญ๐บ, 12:10, 16 July 2024 (UTC)
This article is about the 2016 single by the Weeknd and Daft Punk. The single is a disco-pop track in which the Weeknd tries to reassure his lover to not be scared of falling in love, despite her own failed relationships. With a Warren Fu-directed music video about a "love story in a cursed land", the song peaked at number four on the Billboard Hot 100.
6 months ago, I checked this article out. I noticed that... it wasn't very detailed, so I decided to add some stuff. After a ton of work, I have finally decided to take this to FAC, to become my first (and likely) my only FA. I spent the time between the DYK nomination and this working on its prose, as the DYK reviewer had some concerns about it, so i started to tighten some unnecessary things. I have heard stuff about FAC's being "harsh" which is why for about a month, I have put off doing this. But after a spark of inspiration, I came back to this article and made some final adjustments. I believe this article is ready. ๐ฎ๐ช๐ค๐ฉ๐ข๐ฆ๐ญ'๐ด ๐ฅ๐ฆ๐ข๐ณ ๐ฎ๐ฆ๐ญ๐ข๐ฏ๐ค๐ฉ๐ฐ๐ญ๐บ, 12:10, 16 July 2024 (UTC)
Heartfox
edit- "The track was released for digital download through XO and Republic Records on November 17, 2016" โ suggest converting to active voice: "XO and Republic Records released the track for digital download on November 17, 2016"
- "The Weeknd's vocals in the song received praise" โ from who
- "included on multiple year-end rankings" โ of what
- "the charts" โ music charts
- "releasing" โ and released
- link the title track?
- "alongside" โ along with
- "third and fourth single" โ third and fourth singles
- "XO and Republic Records would send the track to contemporary hit radio in the United Kingdom on November 24" โ this doesn't count as a release, see WP:SINGLE?
- Musicnotes is not a good source as there's no indication this is the original composition or a lead sheet/derivative etc. Keys can change throughout song and go into relative keys, we cant source that just from the key symbol
- "The song's chorus is about five notes, which has the same amount of words" โ this could be worded better
- "he told Variety's Jem Aswad" โ name of interviewer and publication is really irrelevant
- I don't understand why the critical reception section is organized into reviews of the song and reviews of the song in album reviews. It is hard to follow and there are 16 quotes vs. 7 sources. This doesn't align with MOS:QUOTE "Using too many quotes is incompatible with an encyclopedic writing style". Harrison alone is quoted six times. "Music journalists complimented the Weeknd's vocals in the song" is used as a summarizing opening sentence, but this is only indicated by one source (Wolfson).
- There is no attempt at paraphrasing in the rankings section; every source cited is accompanied by two quotes each.
- Hopefully paraphrased better, removed some unnecessary stuff. ๐ฎ๐ช๐ค๐ฉ๐ข๐ฆ๐ญ'๐ด ๐ฅ๐ฆ๐ข๐ณ ๐ฎ๐ฆ๐ญ๐ข๐ฏ๐ค๐ฉ๐ฐ๐ญ๐บ, 00:26, 21 July 2024 (UTC)
- Why aren't these sources used in the article: NY Times, The Observer, LA Times etc, etc.?
Stopping here. Oppose per 1a, 1c. Heartfox (talk) 19:48, 20 July 2024 (UTC)
- I'll continue looking for more sources for critical reception, I toned down some of the overusage of quotes. Thank youย :) ๐ฎ๐ช๐ค๐ฉ๐ข๐ฆ๐ญ'๐ด ๐ฅ๐ฆ๐ข๐ณ ๐ฎ๐ฆ๐ญ๐ข๐ฏ๐ค๐ฉ๐ฐ๐ญ๐บ, 00:26, 21 July 2024 (UTC)