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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Laser brain via FACBot (talk) 13:22, 9 October 2018 [1].

Archie Meets the Punisher edit

Nominator(s): Argento Surfer (talk) 18:42, 30 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about a 1994 mash up between an All-American teenager and a murdering vigilante. The crossover started a trend of Archie meeting unusual guest stars the led to him being killed by the Predator in 2015, among other things. The article was created in 2004 and remained in poor shape until a rewrite and GA promotion earlier this year. Argento Surfer (talk) 18:42, 30 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Media review edit

The fact this comic exists is amazing. Commenting on the only image:

  • The rationale says "300px size unsuitable to use for high end reproduction.", but the image is 255x391 pixels. Looks like it used to be 300px until DatBot resized it. Rephrase rationale please.
  • Alt text is great. Consider adding that the title is Archie meets the Punisher and to describe the font it is in. If you don't, that's fine too.

Fix the one small issue and we will be good. Could you maybe add any images of the artists too? Kees08 (Talk) 23:47, 31 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

  • @Kees08: Thanks for the review. I have updated the alt text and rationale. I also added images for the writer and artists based on what was available in their articles.
  • Kidding - one of the artist's image was non-free and has been removed. Argento Surfer (talk) 12:47, 7 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • File:Batton Lash.jpg
    • Add an English description, remove the comment someone made in the description box
    • Add a personality rights warning
    • Hm. The current license is CC BY-NC-SA 2.0 (not okay on Commons) but a bot verified it as cc-by-2.0 (okay on Commons) at the time of upload. So I suppose it is okay..?
    • Caption is fine. Alt text is nice but not required
  • File:StanGoldberg11.15.08ByLuigiNovi1.jpg
    • License is fine
    • Caption is fine. Alt text is nice but not required

Let me know when you have addressed the above, thanks. Kees08 (Talk) 05:59, 12 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Aoba47 edit

  • The first sentence in the first paragraph of the lead is rather long. I think it may be beneficial to make everything after “with art by…” into its own sentence.
    • done.
  • For this sentence (In the story, the murderous vigilante Punisher mistakes all-American teenager Archie Andrews for his criminal prey.), I am not sure if “murderous” is needed.
    • I believe it is because it's one of Punisher's defining attributes. It's a significant contrast to most non-lethal superheroes like Superman or Spider-Man, and it the primary reason this particular crossover is so odd. It's a stark comparison to Archie meeting Adam West's Batman.
      • Makes sense. Thought I might as well ask. Aoba47 (talk) 03:32, 5 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • I would revise this sentence (Lash came up with the plot after Archie editor Victor Gorelick suggested the general concept.) to something like this (Lash developed the plot from a suggestion by Archie editor Victor Gorelick) for more concise language.
    • done
  • I would revise this sentence (The script was written with the intention of remaining true to the spirit of both characters rather than focus only on Archie's humor or Punisher's action.) to avoid the repetition of the word “script” twice in the same sentence.
    • I think the second instance is spirit... Did you copy the wrong sentence?
      • Apologies; I misread the sentence >< Aoba47 (talk) 03:32, 5 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • For this sentence (The comic book was kept secret inside both companies until it was announced at a press function shortly before it was published), I would change “before it was published” to “before its publication” for more concise language.
    • done
  • I would revise this part (Although the announcement was initially believed to be a joke by news outlets and critics, ) to avoid the passive tense.
    • done
  • For this sentence (Many praised the odd pairing as an interesting narrative hook.), specify what you mean by “many” as you reference both media outlets and critics in the previous sentence.
    • done
  • For this part (During lunch one day in San Diego,), I would say instead (During a lunch in San Diego,) to avoid the vague wording of “one day”.
    • You know, I was really unhappy with that phrase when I wrote it, but couldn't think of a way to avoid it. Your suggestion is embarrassingly obvious.
      • No worries; I think that we all have been there before. Aoba47 (talk) 03:32, 5 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • I would revise this sentence (Before Punisher and Microchip leave Riverdale the next morning, they say goodbye to Archie and his friends.) to (Before leaving Riverdale the next morning, Punisher and Microchip say goodbye to Archie and his friends.) for more concise language.
    • done
  • Do you have any information on the comic’s sales?
    • I may be able to locate something. Comic sales are reported as estimates at best, and prior to 2000 or so they only released data for the Top 100 sellers.

Wonderful work with this article. Once my comments are addressed, I will be more than happy to support this. If you have the time, I would greatly appreciate comments on my current FAC. Either way, have a great weekend! Aoba47 (talk) 20:07, 1 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Aoba47: Thanks for taking the time to look! I have responded to all of your points. Argento Surfer (talk) 13:00, 4 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Thank you for addressing everything. I support this for promotion. Aoba47 (talk) 03:32, 5 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Source review edit

spotchecks not done

  • FN3 should include publication date
  • Be consistent in whether you abbreviate state names
  • Citations to multiple pages should use |pages= rather than |page=

From FunkMonk edit

  • I wish I had read this comic before reviewing here, but well, I'll have a look soon. FunkMonk (talk) 15:17, 20 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Batton Lash should be linked i the image caption.
  • The first paragraph under Development should not only end with a note, but also with a citation.
  • Hero Illustrated and Comic Book Resources are duplinked.
  • I sent you an email with some material that might be useful as sources.
  • "Each artist was responsible for drawing the characters and backgrounds associated with their company's intellectual property" But what was the procedure when characters from each universe meet in the same panels?
    • It worked the same. If the characters met in Riverdale High, then Goldberg drew Archie and the background, Buscema drew the Punisher. If it was in Punisher's van, then Buscema drew the background and Goldberg drew Archie. I assume the background artist did the layout and provided a stick figure or something to guide the character artist, but I don't have a source saying that.
  • "such as Archie vs. Sharknado, Archie Meets KISS, and Archie Meets Glee" Give years?
  • "Prior to the release of Archie vs. Predator in 2015, Geek.com felt that Archie Meets the Punisher was the gold standard for unlikely crossovers."
    • I rewrote this one to be more clear. (I'm guessing that's why it was copied here?) Argento Surfer (talk) 12:25, 25 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Ah, sorry, I forgot to add my comment, which was that does this imply that AVP is the "new" standard? FunkMonk (talk) 13:42, 25 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Coordinator note - This has been open for well over a month and hasn't gained much traction for promotion. Therefore, I will be archiving it shortly and it may be re-nominated after the customary two-week waiting period. --Laser brain (talk) 13:22, 9 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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