Walter.l.smith
The article I chose is Black Land Lost. I will be faced with a tough challenge of building a page from scratch because there isn't a wiki page for my article. My page will give back ground information and the history of Blacks losing their land
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Alkon, A. H., & Guthman, J. (2017). The new food activism: opposition, cooperation, and collective action. Oakland, CA: University of California Press. Alkon, A. H., & Agyeman, J. (2011). Cultivating food justice: race, class, and sustainability. Cambridge, MA: MIT Press. Shapiro, T. (2004). The Hidden Cost of Being African American. New York: Oxford UP Bonilla-Silva, E. (2003). Racism without Racists: Color-blind Racism and the Persistence of Racial Inequality in the United States. Lanham: Rowman& Littlefield Oliver, M. & Thomas M. (2006). Black Wealth, White Wealth: a New Perspective on Racial Inequality. New York: Routledge Conley, D. (2010). Being Black, Living in the Red: Race, Wealth, and Social Policy in America. Berkeley, California: University of California Press. Bowles, S. &Gintis, H. (2002). The Inheritance of Inequality. Journal of Economic Perspectives. 16 (3): 3–30 Bowman, W., (2011). Multigenerational Interactions in Black Middle Class Wealth and Asset Decision Making. Journal of Family Economic Issues. 32 (1): 15–26 Angel, J., (2008). Inheritance in Contemporary America. Baltimore Maryland: The Johns Hopkins University Press. Walter.l.smith (talk) 02:35, 16 September 2017 (UTC)Walter.l.smithWalter.l.smith (talk) 02:35, 16 September 2017 (UTC)
Thanks for the assistance. I spoke with Professor Perkins regarding my edit that was deleted. I was able to see the issues with my edit after reviewing my messages, and talk page. I will try my best to insure these mistakes don’t happen again. Walter.l.smith (talk) 16:53, 13 September 2017 (UTC)Walter.l.smithWalter.l.smith (talk) 16:53, 13 September 2017 (UTC)
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Hi! I'm the content expert for your class and I noticed that your edit at Jack Daniel's was reverted by BarrelProof and I wanted to explain why this happened.
It looks like when you made this edit you removed a hatnote at the top of the page that directed people towards a disambiguation page where they could find other articles with a similar name, which needs to remain in the article. You added a source that you ended up using later in the article to add the following information:
"Brown-Forman Corporations recently announced, a former save by the name of Nearest Green as their first Master Distiller. This news came after Fawn Weaver approached the corporation with years of history and research. Nearest Green is said to have been Jack Daniel's mentor and the person who taught him the art to become a Master Distiller."
Part of the issue here is that the content isn't really dated at all. For example, using the term "recently announced" is fairly vague and can quickly become dated, as the term recent doesn't really apply when you realize that the company marked this distinction back in May. It's better to be more specific and write something like "In May 2017 Brown-Forman officially recognized Nearest Green as their first Master Distiller after being approached by writer Fawn Weaver with evidence that suggested that Green was Jack Daniel's mentor and had trained him to become a Master Distiller." This dates the information so that you don't have to update this later to fix the outdated terminology. There was also a misspelling, but the main part was likely that the date thing.
I've tagged BarrelProof so they can add to this if they like. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:58, 12 September 2017 (UTC)
- In my view, there were multiple problems with those edits. Another problem that isn't explicitly mentioned above is that the edits left the article with a strange "[1]" at the top of the article all by itself, due to a reference citation that was put at the top and not connected to any article content. Here is a link to that version of the article. Of course, I do not have any objection to adding some mention of Mr. Green in the article, but whatever is added needs to be written reasonably well, supported by citations to appropriate sources, and placed in an appropriate context. For guidelines on using the word "recently" in articles, please see WP:DATED and WP:RELTIME. —BarrelProof (talk) 16:24, 12 September 2017 (UTC)
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editHello, Walter.l.smith, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:58, 28 September 2017 (UTC)
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editHi Walter,
I did some editing for flow, but by large your work is very well done. The main things I would recommend is to find more sourcing (what you have here is good but slightly on the light side) and to find the names of the lawsuits mentioned later in the article. Other than that, this looks ready to move live, if you're ready. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:29, 13 October 2017 (UTC)
Good afternoon Shalor,
Thanks so much for your assistance, you are awesome. I will add more source as I continue to do more research. User:Walter.l.smith
- Hi Walter! Your educator asked me to weigh in - the article still looks good! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:54, 7 December 2017 (UTC)