Purpleoctopus
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:48, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
Peer Review edit
Hello,
Overall, the content within the article is very neutral and factual. I have a few points that may help improve the article.
The sources sources seem to be relevant. However, I would suggest finding more sources if possible. Also, Im a bit confused about your sources in general. You seem to have a number of references at the end of your page that do not connect to anything and I'm not sure what they are supposed to be citing.
Additionally, the sentence, "In April 2019, Charm City was released first in the 2018 Tribeca Film Festival, and later on PBS as part of Independent Lens.' is a bit confusing the first time I read it. I would suggest putting 2018 after TFF to make it less confusing.
I also noticed that some of your sentences seem a bit too close to the source's sentences and it may be considered plagiarism.
Lastly, I noticed that one if your sources mentioned Marilyn Ness' role in producing the 1971 film. If you can, that may be beneficial to add to your "career" section. Water392 (talk) 17:09, 4 November 2019 (UTC)