Liliana.Guti
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:44, 25 February 2020 (UTC)
Yesenia Pinon's Peer Review
editI will be reviewing Liliana.Guti article on the 1930 Land Apportionment Act, which can be found here: User:Liliana.Guti/sandbox
Overall, your lead Lead reflects the content you have added. However, you should maybe try to incorporate a little more information to your Lead on the land rights prior to 1930. Your Lead also includes an introductory sentence that clearly describes your article's topic. Your Lead does include a brief description of the article's major sections, however, as mentioned earlier, you should add brief information on the land rights prior to 1930. Your Lead doesn't include information that is not present in the article, which is good, since the Lead is only supposed to have the information you are presenting. I think you did a great job in the Lead section because it is not overly detailed, its simply a clear road map of your article.
For content, everything you added is relevant. I'm not sure if you are drafting a new article or if you are helping improve one. But I actually found a Wikipedia page you could link your article with. The Wikipedia page is Land reform in Zimbabwe. (Link: Land reform in Zimbabwe#Creation of the Tribal Trust Lands )
Additionally, you do have some information on the consequences of the 1930 act, however, you do not have much information on the 1980 Lancaster House Agreement which basically seeks to distribute land equally between black subsistence farmers and whites. I know your article is not on the 1980 Agreement, however, a good ending on it which then links to its page would be good for readers. On the other hand, the content you have added seems neutral and is not biased. You provide straight facts and information that informs the reader, without leading them to have a particular position. I clicked on all of your sources link and they seem to be working perfectly fine. They all seem to be reliable academic source. Your content is well-written and clear to read. I did find some grammatical errors and some extra words in your section on Land Rights before 1930. Your article is supported by enough sources! Good Job!
Your content will improve the knowledge on the 1930 Land Apportionment Act of Wikipedia since the Land Reform in Zimbabwe article does not provide enough information on the 1930 Act.
Tara Madhav's Peer Review
editGreat work Liliana! This article was interesting to read and well-written.
The lead reflects the organization of the article. You also go over the organization of the article, and don't include information that isn't in the rest of the article. I would perhaps explain in the second sentence who the colonial power was that passed the law. I would be more specific in the last sentence when you mention how the "current administration works to redefine land ownership in the twenty-first century."
Your content is relevant and up-to-date with the topic at hand. I liked how you linked the topic to land reform in Zimbabwe today. I think at the end of the "Legacy and consequences" page you could go into more depth about the nature of land reform in Zimbabwe today, since its such a contentious issue.
Your content is neutral and the article is written without bias. The only comment I would have for this section is to explain/elaborate on causes of inequality due to the 1930 act — financial effects of segregation? Statistics that reflect the population crisis/ecological damage? Testimonies from native peoples that were affected by this and following legislation?
All content is properly cited and is backed up by reliable sources that are fairly exhaustive. All citations are scholarly resources, with the exception of Encyclopedia Britannica which is used for basic information. The sources are current and the links work. Perhaps you could incorporate another source for the "Land rights before 1930" section besides the first source if there is a reliable source that would work.
The content is well-written and well-organized in chronological order. One grammatical error to point out:
- "corruption lead" -> "corruption led"
Your images are helpful and well-captioned. You could add a couple more towards the end of the article since the first two come early in the article.
Your article meets the notability standards (as Yesenia pointed out, the article on land reform in Zimbabwe is also pertinent for your subject). This article is super important for Zimbabwean history as you outline well.
Overall, I really liked your article. Nice work! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Taram21 (talk • contribs) 03:41, 7 April 2020 (UTC)