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The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:53, 22 May 2012 (UTC)
Thor 2 edit
- ... that Thor 2, the sequel to the 2011 film Thor, is set to be directed by Alan Taylor who is best known for directing episodes of the HBO television series, Game of Thrones?
- Reviewed: Costa Chica of Guerrero
Created/expanded by TriiipleThreat (talk). Self nom at 14:32, 23 April 2012 (UTC)
Date, length, hook, and referencing look good. I'd maybe input a comma after Alan Taylor, but that's a personal preference thing. Can't wait for this film to come out! Ruby 2010/2013 02:35, 25 April 2012 (UTC)
I'm concerned that some of the phrasing used by this article might be too close to that of its sources. Compare for example "marathon devotion required for a major visual-effects epic and the urgency to have the script process underway" with "marathon devotion required for a major visual-effects epic and the urgency to get the script process underway". Nikkimaria (talk) 04:38, 27 April 2012 (UTC)
I rephrased some of the more general wording. hopefully it is enough.--TriiipleThreat (talk) 11:47, 29 April 2012 (UTC)
- I think the hook is rather dull. "A movie was directed by a director who is best known for working on a tv show..."--Carabinieri (talk) 23:56, 9 May 2012 (UTC)
- Agree. Also, though the paraphrasing has improved, there's still a bit of tweaking needed - "The film would mark Kirk's directorial debut on a major feature film" vs "The pic would mark Kirk's directorial debut on a major Hollywood production", for example. Nikkimaria (talk) 20:30, 13 May 2012 (UTC)
- The example phrase is a straight forward point, there aren't too many ways to phrase it. I think the non-attributed phrasing is sufficiently different as not to violate WP:COPYVIO, though if others think more can be done then feel free to do so. Also any suggestions for a more interesting hook would be welcomed. Thank you.--TriiipleThreat (talk) 12:34, 14 May 2012 (UTC)
- There are lots of ways to phrase that point if you pull it apart a bit: "The movie would have been the first time Kirk directed a major motion picture" is one, or you might flip the sentence so his television experience comes first, followed by the major motion picture info, which could use different order and phrasing. But Nikkimaria's right: identical structure with eight exact words in a row and a couple of synonyms filling out the sentence is way too much.
- As for the hook, I wonder whether the fact that both Taylor and one of the earlier candidates, Kirk, were both directors on Game of Thrones might help it a bit; it might make it murkier, though. That it will start filming less than a year before its scheduled release? May not even be atypical. A "more Viking-influenced feel"? That might have possibilities, though perhaps "will" is too strong a word:
- ALT1: ... that the film Thor 2 will have a "more Viking-influenced feel" than its 2011 predecessor, Thor? — BlueMoonset (talk) 05:05, 20 May 2012 (UTC)
- Thank you for the help. I changed "The pic would mark Kirk's directorial debut on a major Hollywood production" to "The film would be Kirk's first time directing a big-budget motion picture". Also ALT1 is fine with me.--TriiipleThreat (talk) 13:46, 21 May 2012 (UTC)
- Better, thanks. Nikkimaria (talk) 14:11, 22 May 2012 (UTC)
- As for the hook, I wonder whether the fact that both Taylor and one of the earlier candidates, Kirk, were both directors on Game of Thrones might help it a bit; it might make it murkier, though. That it will start filming less than a year before its scheduled release? May not even be atypical. A "more Viking-influenced feel"? That might have possibilities, though perhaps "will" is too strong a word: