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The result was: promoted by  — Crisco 1492 (talk) 13:52, 3 February 2013 (UTC)

Taku Inlet

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A gray mud meandering tidal stream emptying into Taku Inlet

Created/expanded by Rosiestep (talk), Nvvchar (talk), Dr. Blofeld (talk). Nominated by Nvvchar (talk) at 03:31, 17 January 2013 (UTC)

  • Length and date are good. Two issues I see - in "Geography", the phrase "a large Swiss type glacier" is used. What is the Swiss-type of glacier? This needs to be clarified. Ref # 3 needs additional citation - it's lacking the author name and publication name. From the url given I assume it is from the journal "Arctic", but it needs vol. and pg. #'s. May I suggest:
  • ALT 2: ... that five glaciers empty into Alaska's Taku Inlet (pictured)?
Short and sweet, and the original hook doesn't have much interest factor imo. This hook could be sourced to the above ref. Otherwise, looking good. The Interior (Talk) 02:31, 1 February 2013 (UTC)
  • I've deleted the "Swiss type glacier" sentence as I couldn't fine a source. I've tidied up the refs. --Rosiestep (talk) 05:44, 1 February 2013 (UTC)
  • One more problem sentence: "A complete preliminary navigational chart, to a scale of 1:10,000, has been prepared by field surveys, which had facilitated interested navigators to operate steam ships to view the glaciers"'. Confusing because I'm not sure too many steam-powered ships are plying Taku Inlet at present. The Interior (Talk) 03:00, 2 February 2013 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review. ALT2 Hook suggested is OK. Made small changes in the above sentence in the text from "which had facilitated" to " to facilitate." I hope it satisfies the reviewer's observations.--Nvvchar. 14:32, 2 February 2013 (UTC)
NVVchar, it was more the "steam" part I was concerned about! Thanks for the fixes, refs look good now Rosie. Tick for original hook. I still like mine, but I guess we need an outside party to tick that. The Interior (Talk) 21:39, 2 February 2013 (UTC)