Template:Did you know nominations/Songs and Flowers of the Wasatch

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The result was: promoted by Vaticidalprophet talk 10:16, 12 October 2023 (UTC)

Songs and Flowers of the Wasatch

Created by Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk). Self-nominated at 17:48, 25 August 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Songs and Flowers of the Wasatch; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.

General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems

Hook eligibility:

QPQ: Done.
Overall: @Rachel Helps (BYU): Good article, but the hook isn't interesting to me. Can something else be proposed? Onegreatjoke (talk) 20:10, 24 September 2023 (UTC)
Thank you for the review, Onegreatjoke. The significance of the book is very much "inside baseball" of Mormon studies, but I'll try for a more interesting hook. How about:
ALT 1 "... that according to Mormon women's historian Jennifer Reeder, Songs and Flowers of the Wasatch, an anthology of Utah women's poetry created for display at the 1893 World's Columbian Exposition, represented a "pivotal" shift in Mormon history toward a "socially-accepted American cultural and religious heritage"?"
or
ALT 2 "... that Eliza R. Snow's poem, "Invocation", which mentions the Mormon doctrine of Heavenly Mother, appears in Songs and Flowers of the Wasatch, an anthology of Utah women's poetry created for display at the 1893 World's Columbian Exposition?"
I remember something about not being able to quote critics in DYK hooks, but I couldn't find the rule about it, so maybe it's not actually a rule? Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 18:04, 25 September 2023 (UTC)
@Rachel Helps (BYU): While neat, these hooks are too big and pass the 200 character limit quite heavily so they will need to be shortened. Onegreatjoke (talk) 02:37, 28 September 2023 (UTC)
@Onegreatjoke: Oops, my mistake. How much context can I leave out? ALT 3 is 209 characters. ALT 4 is 129.
ALT 3 "... that Songs and Flowers of the Wasatch represented a shift in Mormon history toward a "socially-accepted American cultural and religious heritage", according to historian Jennifer Reeder?"
ALT 4 "... that Songs and Flowers of the Wasatch includes a poem about Heavenly Mother?"
Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 16:25, 28 September 2023 (UTC)
This is a drive-by comment but I feel that ALT 4 might not be appealing much to those unfamiliar with the LDS Church's beliefs, particularly about the Heavenly Mother. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 01:07, 29 September 2023 (UTC)
Approve new hooks though mainly alt3. Onegreatjoke (talk) 18:04, 6 October 2023 (UTC)