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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 22:57, 2 December 2018 (UTC)
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Siti Qomariyah edit
... that Siti Qomariyah was Amat Antono's running mate, before winning and losing to him in the following elections?Source: All are in [1]: 114, 132, 139
- Reviewed: Bryn Davies (footballer)
Created by Juxlos (talk). Self-nominated at 11:54, 29 October 2018 (UTC).
The article meets all the requirements (length, newness, QPQ, hook interest, sourcing, etc.), but I've struck the hook as I find it difficult to understand at first glance. From what I understand in the article: Qomariyah was initially Antono's running mate, then ran against him the next election and won, but then lost to him the following election? I get the gist but it wasn't immediately clear from the hook; it may have to be rewritten in this case. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 13:05, 30 October 2018 (UTC)
- Maybe
ALT1: ... that Siti Qomariyah was Amat Antono's running mate, but defeated him the following election and lost to him in the election after that?
ALT2: ... that Siti Qomariyah was Amat Antono's deputy, successor, and predecessor as regent of Pekalongan, Indonesia?
Juxlos (talk) 21:23, 30 October 2018 (UTC)
- ALT2 is the better hook, me thinks, but I think the position she held (regent) needs to be mentioned here. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 23:41, 30 October 2018 (UTC)
- Maybe
