- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Kingsif (talk) 18:07, 10 May 2021 (UTC)
IBM worker organization
Created by Shushugah (talk). Self-nominated at 20:16, 21 April 2021 (UTC).
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Hi @Shushugah:, this is my first DYK review, so I hope this review will go according to the rules and common sense.
Here are my comments on the text: I can't find any information on the underground newsletter "The Resistor" to which you refer. The only source I could download is a leaflet with the content you mention. If this is the case, you would probably better write: "...distributed a leaflet to IBM shareholders that...". Also, I think, you could replace "protested" (which needs the preposition "against") their employer's business deals with "compared"?
In the text, I would add "Since its foundation in 1924,...and you could add a short article description. But most of all, there is no bolded name of the article in the lead. And, finally, was it really IBM Europe who formed a European Works Council, or rather the union? (or IBM Europe accepted a...)
Article length and age are fine, no copyvio or plagiarism concerns, reliable sources are used. The lead needs a bolded expression of the article name. And the hook needs to be slightly changed. Munfarid1 (talk) 21:15, 7 May 2021 (UTC)
Thanks, @Shushugah:, now both the article and the hook look fine to me. The only thing I am not sure about is the fact that you don't have a pagename in bold at the beginning of the article. I couldn't find on the Help pages, if this is really obligatory. So just to be sure, that everything is according to the rules for review and article formatting, I am asking @Gerda Arendt:, a seasoned and very helpful DYK reviewer to give us her opinion. As soon as this is clear, I will finish the review with a yes. (One more question to Gerda: I have to prove my first QPQ, before another of my own articles can be ready for DYK. - How will that reviewer know that I actually reviewed this article on IBM worker organization?) - Thanks in advance, Munfarid1 (talk) 06:52, 8 May 2021 (UTC)
- Hi everyone, thanks for helping me to finish my first review. After adding a sentence and the bold pagename, everything is fine, and I have just added the green tick for the next stage. Munfarid1 (talk) 08:01, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
- Hi @Shushugah:, as another reviewer mentioned that there are too many repetitions of IBM in the hook, I have just changed your hook, and hope this is okay by you.Munfarid1 (talk) 20:32, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
- Came to promote, but I'm not finding the hook information in the article. The article says there was a newsletter, doesn't seem to mention a flier or distributing it at shareholder meetings? (Also Munfarid1, when you suggest a new hook, it's generally best to strike the hook you're rejecting and give the new hook a new number -- check other nominations to see how we number additional/new hooks -- and you can't approve a hook you suggest, so if you write the new hook yourself you need to ask for another reviewer to approve.) —valereee (talk) 16:47, 10 May 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks @Valereee:! I have updated the article, to be explicit that fliers were distributed at a shareholder meeting (sources don't make it clear if Resistor or not, I won't speculate, but they all do mention role Resistor had in sharing/spreading this news), since the existing sources already mentioned that, but it wasn't formally in the article itself. Thank you for catching that! Shushugah (talk) 17:50, 10 May 2021 (UTC)
Hi @Shushugah:, this is my first DYK review, so I hope this review will go according to the rules and common sense.
Here are my comments on the text: I can't find any information on the underground newsletter "The Resistor" to which you refer. The only source I could download is a leaflet with the content you mention. If this is the case, you would probably better write: "...distributed a leaflet to IBM shareholders that...". Also, I think, you could replace "protested" (which needs the preposition "against") their employer's business deals with "compared"?
In the text, I would add "Since its foundation in 1924,...and you could add a short article description. But most of all, there is no bolded name of the article in the lead. And, finally, was it really IBM Europe who formed a European Works Council, or rather the union? (or IBM Europe accepted a...)
Article length and age are fine, no copyvio or plagiarism concerns, reliable sources are used. The lead needs a bolded expression of the article name. And the hook needs to be slightly changed. Munfarid1 (talk) 21:15, 7 May 2021 (UTC)