Template:Did you know nominations/Hugh Lowery

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The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:27, 18 August 2014 (UTC)

Hugh Lowery edit

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~~... that Hugh Lowery taught formation flying during World War I and played in the first National Football League season after the war?~~

Reviewed: Gerd Nienstedt

Created by Cbl62 (talk). Self nominated at 14:28, 12 August 2014 (UTC).

New enough and long enough. Interesting article and hook. Strong sourcing. QPQ completed. Good to go. EricEnfermero ^HOWDY! 03:18, 13 August 2014 (UTC)

@EricEnfermero:, did you check the sources for close paraphrasing? Yoninah (talk) 22:59, 13 August 2014 (UTC)

No, because it looked to me like all of the sources with prose were PD due to age. I'm not very active at DYK, so I will address that if you think it's necessary. EricEnfermero ^HOWDY! 00:37, 14 August 2014 (UTC)

I went ahead and checked all the sources and did not find close paraphrasing. However, the second half of the hook, about playing in the first NFL season after the war, needs a cite per DYK rules. Yoninah (talk) 00:00, 15 August 2014 (UTC)

*In the second paragraph of the Professional football section, the sentence about the AFPA founding is sourced and that source includes the year (1920) and the names of the teams, including the Detroit Heralds. The next sentence has a cite to Pro-Football-Reference.com that shows he played for Detroit in 1920. Does that work? EricEnfermero ^HOWDY! 02:45, 15 August 2014 (UTC)

I'll take a look and fix anything that needs fixing tomorrow. Cbl62 (talk) 03:43, 15 August 2014 (UTC)

There may have been a slight ambiguity in the hook. To fix that, here's an alternative:

alt 1 ... that Hugh Lowery taught formation flying during World War I and later played in the first National Football League season? Cbl62 (talk) 13:42, 15 August 2014 (UTC)

OK, I see that the hook is an amalgamation of two sources, one verified and one AGF, both of which are cited inline. ALT1 good to go. Yoninah (talk) 20:30, 16 August 2014 (UTC)