Template:Did you know nominations/Gil Cisneros

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:19, 21 June 2018 (UTC)

Gil Cisneros edit

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... that Gil Cisneros won a USD$260 million Mega Millions jackpot?
- ALT1:... that after he won a USD$260 million Mega Millions jackpot, Gil Cisneros became a philanthropist?
- ALT2:... that after he won a USD$260 million Mega Millions jackpot, Gil Cisneros created a foundation to aid Latinos receive their educations?

Reviewed: ~~IOU~~ Template:Did you know nominations/Shmerke Kaczerginski
Comment: Trying to stay away from his political candidacy in the 2018 elections in the hooks. Is that a mistake?

Created by Muboshgu (talk). Self-nominated at 16:38, 13 June 2018 (UTC).

It’s very close, but needs cleanup
Length is good, over 1900 characters.
New enough, expanded froma redirect on date indicated
Refs look impeccable
there are some minor cleanup issues that can easily be fixed, grammar and sentence structure are awkward or wrong in a few places
I strongly prefer the second hook over the other two, it’s very compelling

Beeblebrox (talk) 20:26, 14 June 2018 (UTC)

@Beeblebrox: Over the weekend, I did some clean up, finding a few places where I did mess up in the initial writing. Please let me know if there are any other problems I missed. QPQ is provided too. And I agree with preferring ALT1 after considering it for a time. – Muboshgu (talk) 17:49, 18 June 2018 (UTC)

Thanks for reminding me,

looks good .Beeblebrox (talk) 18:32, 18 June 2018 (UTC)