- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:49, 7 June 2014 (UTC)
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Djawoto edit
- ... that in 1966 the Indonesian ambassador Djawoto (pictured) was granted political asylum in China?
- ALT1 suggestion: ... that in 1966 Indonesian ambassador Djawoto (pictured) was granted political asylum in China, following the mass killings of 1965–66?
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Mourneview Park
Created by Soman (talk). Self nominated at 19:23, 13 May 2014 (UTC).
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Sufficient prose length; hook under 200 characters; appears neutral; reliable seeming sources and hook cited (and specifically checked for verifiability); spot check found no infringement; created within the past five days. In short, ready to go!--Fuhghettaboutit (talk) 04:46, 16 May 2014 (UTC)
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Neither the article nor the source make any mention of Djawoto seeking political asylum, simply that he was granted it. Also, I've read the article's final sentence, Albeit not a communist cadre, Djawoto has not allowed to return to Indonesia.
, more than once without understanding what it's getting at: the first clause makes no sense in context, and both clauses have grammatical problems. BlueMoonset (talk) 01:52, 18 May 2014 (UTC)
- As an individual cannot be a cadre, the last sentence still makes no sense. I've removed the first clause. However, what remains needs context: did he ask to return? When was he refused permission and by whom (or was it the government as a whole)? BlueMoonset (talk) 14:34, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
- Yes, an individual can be a communist cadre, see [1]. And this is backed up by the reference. The reference does not go into detail whether he solicited to be allowed to return or not, but does state that he did not get permission to come back. Do recall that his Indonesian citizenship was withdrawn. --Soman (talk) 17:47, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
- Note on "Not granted permission to return"... he was an ambassador in a Communist state after a rebellion (by/blamed on, depending who you believe) the Communist Party. Refusing to be recalled just sealed his fate (though I have little doubt it may have saved his life). He sure as heck wasn't the only one who was never allowed to return home after being in China during the G30S movement. There's a lot of context here that is important, and the article is not really giving that context its due position; that the killings were blamed on communists (perhaps with the backing of China) is very important to understand the situation in which Djawoto found himself.
- There are also some referencing issues. This source, for instance, is not just "Jakarta" but The Encyclopedia of Jakarta, published by the Jakarta City Government. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:33, 23 May 2014 (UTC)
Issues not addressed. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:10, 30 May 2014 (UTC)
- The reference mentioned has been reworded now. Apart from that, what issues remain? Please be more specific. It can't be a prerequisite that the article should explain all context of post-1965 developments in Indonesia. The verifiable point is that he sought exile in China and that there was never any opening in his life-time to enable his return. --Soman (talk) 19:10, 30 May 2014 (UTC)
- I can add a sentence, easily. We don't need to go into very much detail, just note that the 1966 killings were a purge of people thought to be (key words) communists or communist sympathizers, and that people considered communists or communist sympathizers were not allowed to return to the country. Everything's already cited at Indonesian exile literature; we can just rework it for this article. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:51, 30 May 2014 (UTC)
- I've added a bit, please check. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 00:52, 1 June 2014 (UTC)
- I can add a sentence, easily. We don't need to go into very much detail, just note that the 1966 killings were a purge of people thought to be (key words) communists or communist sympathizers, and that people considered communists or communist sympathizers were not allowed to return to the country. Everything's already cited at Indonesian exile literature; we can just rework it for this article. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:51, 30 May 2014 (UTC)
- The reference mentioned has been reworded now. Apart from that, what issues remain? Please be more specific. It can't be a prerequisite that the article should explain all context of post-1965 developments in Indonesia. The verifiable point is that he sought exile in China and that there was never any opening in his life-time to enable his return. --Soman (talk) 19:10, 30 May 2014 (UTC)
Great, good to go. Article is new enough, long enough, and well referenced. Hook is interesting and referenced. No close paraphrasing found. Image, however, should not be used, as we don't have any indication that this was published more than fifty years ago (not that it was taken more than fifty years ago, but published). — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:44, 4 June 2014 (UTC)
- Thank you, User:Crisco 1492, for your review. To speed up this nom, I have removed the image from the hook and the article page; it can be replaced later as soon as the publishing-date issue has been resolved. Please could you kindly clarify which hook or hooks you have reviewed, or strike out the one that does not apply? Thank you.--Storye book (talk) 13:36, 7 June 2014 (UTC)
- Alright, thanks. Both hooks are okay, although I prefer ALT1. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 13:39, 7 June 2014 (UTC)