Template:Did you know nominations/Ashleigh Brennan

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The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:15, 27 June 2012 (UTC)

Ashleigh Brennan edit

Brennan at a 2008 parade

  • ... that 2008 and 2012 Australian artistic gymnastic Olympian Ashleigh Brennan (pictured) drinks coffee before every competition?

Created/expanded by LauraHale (talk). Self nom at 05:16, 25 June 2012 (UTC)

  • Hook and article length fine, hook fact confirmed (although article does not explicitly specify "every competition", source confirms this). Quick check of several sources for close paraphrasing revealed no issues. Sasata (talk) 19:45, 25 June 2012 (UTC)
  • I'm not sure about prepositions. The article has "in the balance beam and the floor" in one spot (as well as "in the balance beam and floor", so minus one article), "in the floor and balance beam" in another, and both "in the floor" and "on the floor". What is it--in or on? It also says "eighth in the all around 12th in the uneven bars, and sixteenth in the vault" and that needs to be fixed (and why is "all around" not the last thing mentioned?). I've made some copyedits, but it may need more. I fixed some templates: often "web" is used where "news" is proper--Laura, I see this still in your articles; in two cases a date is found in the place of article author (I fixed one of them); newspaper/publisher names are incorrect (in note four, The Australian is not the name of the publisher but of the newspaper--it needs to be wikilinked and italicized); titles are incorrect (this is published in something called Inside Gymnastics); there is no publisher called "abc.net.au" though there is a ABC News (Australia); et cetera. If you start by using the right template and using the right field, sticking in the right name, that would save a lot of time. DYK volunteer, please don't pass this before copyedits are done. And one more thing--the hook seems kind of quirky, but if you look at the article one sees that it's nothing but a more or less trivial detail that has no connection to anything, it's just a preference. If there's more to be found or said on coffee and this athlete then maybe it's OK, but in the current state it is not; H3 requires relevance and I don't see any. Drmies (talk) 01:07, 26 June 2012 (UTC)
  • Dear fellow DYK volunteer: feel free to make more copyedits if you think they are necessary, or will make you happy. I think the article is good enough for DYK, and I find the hook interesting (I was drawn to it, it's why I chose this article to review). How can it be "trivial" if it's part of her routine preparation for competition? Sasata
  • I third that this looks ready to go for DYK (having fixed a couple parameters myself). For the coffee, it is listed as a "superstition", which may be worth mentioning. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:51, 27 June 2012 (UTC)

(talk) 04:01, 27 June 2012 (UTC)