Talk:Wolf & I/GA1

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Cartoon network freak in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 08:25, 23 July 2016 (UTC)Reply

Hi there! I'm Cartoon network freak and I'm going to review this GAN for possible GA submission.

Lead

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  • Connect the two opening sentences
  • and RCA Records. It was issued as a CD single, featuring two other singles from the eponymous album. → and RCA Records, with the recording being issued as a CD single, featuring two other singles from the eponymous album.
  • You use the word "track" two consecutive times; try to change it
  • critics → music critics + link to music journalism
  • called it among the best on the parent album → called it one of the highlights on the parent album
  • released to → released onto
  • 2010, in → remove comma
  • was performed live → was sung live; word repetition

Background and composition

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  • a wolf pack; → end sentence here
  • stated "it's the type of erotic fairytale [Welch] would sell her kneecaps for". → stated that "it's the type of erotic fairytale [Welch] would sell her kneecaps for".
  • claimed "the → claimed that "the
  • compared it to → compared "Wolf & I" to
  • described it → described the recording
  • You use the word "described" two times in-a-row here
  • stated how → remove "how"
  • adding how → adding that

Critical reception

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  • called it a "sweet → called the recording a "sweet
  • album songs → you use the word "song" consecutively
  • stating the → stating that the
  • You use the word "stated" two times in-a-row here
  • stated "however → stated that "however

Promotion

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  • single "Sun of a Gun" → add comma before "Sun of a Gun"
  • uploaded to → uploaded onto
  • account → channel
  • in support of the release of Oh Land → in order to support the release of Oh Land
  • a drummer. → a drummer.[12]
  • You use the word "perform" two times in-a-row here
  • The blogger behind Alfitude.com → Kieron Tyler from website Alfitude
  • stating "she → stating that "she

Credits and personnel

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  • from Oh Land liner notes → from the liner notes of Oh Land
  • You may want to list the recording studios

Release history

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  • Use ''wikitable unsortable plainrowheaders''
  • Use ''!scope="row"|'' for United States
  • Use a "/" (slash) for listing the labels

References

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  • alfitude.com (Ref#13) → Alfitude

Outcome of GAN review

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  On hold for 7 days. Apart from some word repetitions and minor grammar issues, this article is well-written and referenced. Good job, Carbrera! Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 09:06, 23 July 2016 (UTC)Reply

@Cartoon network freak: All finished. Thanks for the review as always. Carbrera (talk) 22:16, 23 July 2016 (UTC)Reply
@Carbrera: Passing. Congrats! Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:12, 24 July 2016 (UTC)Reply
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