Talk:Wagon Master

Latest comment: 2 months ago by Jeremy Butler in topic Is the plot description's language too flowery?

Is the plot description's language too flowery?

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The tone of this plot summary seems too flowery and not neutrally descriptive.

For example, a phrase like "feral adult sons" is not literally accurate (they aren't literally wild animals). And the final line ("Providence smiles on the faithful, and their shepherds. The seed corn will go in before the winter rains") sounds like it was taken from a Western novel. It's an interpretation of the final scene instead of a description of it.

I will copyedit the plot and remove elements that are not descriptive unless I hear any objections. Jeremy Butler (talk) 13:39, 26 March 2024 (UTC)Reply