Talk:Voodoo (Oh Land song)/GA1
Latest comment: 6 years ago by Aoba47 in topic GA Review
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GA Review
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 17:24, 17 August 2017 (UTC)
- Picking this up for review. Aoba47 (talk) 17:24, 17 August 2017 (UTC)
- Review
- I am not sure if "taken from" is necessary; I think that "from" by itself is fine. This applies to the lead and the body of the article.
- In the lead, I would link "digitally" to "digital download".
- Would it be possible to combine these two sentences into one (The track was written by Nanna Øland Fabricius and Dan Carey; Carey also solely produced it). Maybe something like: (Nanna Øland Fabricius wrote the track in collaboration with its producer Dan Carey).
- Link "Robyn" in the body of the article.
- In the first two sentence of the "Background and composition" section, you repeat "album" a few times in close proximity so I would recommend revising to avoid repetition.
- There is a stray parenthesis in this sentence: "It was recorded in 2010 at Carey's home studios in Streatham), while mixing occurred at Metropolis Studios in London".
- Please link "chorus" and "refrain" in the "Background and composition" section.
- I am not sure what is meant by "the boring tendencies". Would it be better to replace the phrase with "the trends".
- I am not sure if the "work[s]" quote is necessary; I think paraphrasing may be better.
- Please include Metropolis Studios in the infobox.
- Could you specify who was making the comparisons to Rihanna?
- Final comment
- Great work with this. Once my comments are addressed, I will pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 17:37, 17 August 2017 (UTC)
- Aoba47 – I know how busy you are currently so thank you for taking time to review this. I completed addressing any issues. Regards, Carbrera (talk) 19:23, 17 August 2017 (UTC).
- Thank you for addressing my comments. I will ✓ Pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 19:31, 17 August 2017 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.