Talk:Vanilla Chocolat/GA3

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 01:02, 4 March 2016 (UTC)

Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.

Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 01:02, 4 March 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

• What do you mean by "being vanilla-coloured" in the alt box? Could this possibly be reworded?
• Remove the flat list from the genre; there's only one genre listed
• Remove the flat list form the producer; there's only one producer listed

Lead

• Remove the space before the link to Romanian
• Change 'sophomore' to 'second'
• Remove the reference as you do not need one in the lead
• Remove 'herself' from the listing of writers involved with the track
• Remove 'alone' from the listing of writers involved with the track
• Remove the mention of 5 million views for the music video
• Remove the video comparison to "Selfie en Paris"
• Change 'Everything Express' into 'Musical critics'
• Change 'Hitfire' to 'others'
• Again, remove the reference
• Overall, I feel this lead could be significantly reworded

Background and recording

• Remove the second 's' in '26-seconds' in the description of the included audio
• Again, remove 'herself' and 'alone' from the first sentence
• Remove 'the' immediately before 'Fonogram Studios'
• The reftitle is a bit too long for the source after "like on [her] second studio album."
• I think 'commended' sounds like a weird word choice since she's describing her own song

Critical response

• I think this section should be renamed 'Critical reception'
• Include a topic sentence, stating that the song received generally positive reviews upon release
• You list two completely different sources for the same quote, so this needs to be fixed and/or removed
• You keep using 'they', but not clarifying who 'they' is
• The '[...]' in the quotes needs to be formatted correctly to Wikipedia standards
• Possible expansion of this section would be appreciated as well

Live performances

• This should be moved below 'Music video'
• Combine the first two sentences
• Combine the sentences discussing her performances on Pro FM radio
• Italicize 'The Voice'
• Again, Italicize 'The Voice' or replace with 'the program'

Music video

• Add a space before 'A selfie video...'
• Link 'selfie' in the lead sentence
• Combine the sentences discussing some of the television shows she filmed the video on
• The reftitle could be shortened perhaps in the source involving plagiarism accusations
• The last sentence doesn't seem too necessary; if you want to keep it, I'd suggest adding more video reviews/reception towards the video

Credits and personnel

• Looks good!

Track listings

• The Spanish/Turkish/Polish download box needs to have proper spaces used

References

• Primarily, a template needs to be added to the article since one is available
• [11] - Unlink YouTube
• [12] - Unlink YouTube
• [16] - Unlink YouTube
• [21] - Link iTunes store

End of GA Review:

Good article, but it definitely needs to be put on hold for now. There are mistakes that need to be visited before GA consideration. Gimme a holler when any updating has taken place. Carbrera (talk) 01:07, 5 March 2016 (UTC)

Carbrera, I've adressed everything above besides the expansion of some of the article's topics, as I couldn't find any other reliable source out there. Thanks! Cartoon network freak (talk) 13:49, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

I think this article is probably one of the better ones out there when it comes to Alexandra Stan-related topics. Thanks for your contributions to the article and your cooperation. Carbrera (talk) 15:32, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

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