Talk:Typhoon Nancy (1982)
Latest comment: 10 years ago by Yellow Evan in topic Additional impact information
Typhoon Nancy (1982) has been listed as one of the Natural sciences good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it. Review: February 11, 2014. (Reviewed version). |
Typhoon Nancy (1982) was nominated as a Natural sciences good article, but it did not meet the good article criteria at the time (January 1, 2014). There are suggestions on the review page for improving the article. If you can improve it, please do; it may then be renominated. |
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Reviewer: Cloudchased (talk · contribs) 15:08, 1 January 2014 (UTC)
Hi, YE – I'll be reviewing this.
- I've done a quick read through the article and the prose is simply not up to scratch in many spots. Here's some examples (I'm not going to comment on every single problem, as that would take a long while):
- "On October 10, Nancy, Tropical cyclogenesis occurred." This simply isn't comprehensible, and doesn't really elaborate on how it developed at all.
- "Its winds were reduced to tropical storm strength, but Nancy re-intensified to typhoon" – typhoon status, no?
- "In the Philippines, damage was the worst in Cagayan and Isabella." The second "the" is extraneous.
- Don't start sentences with numbers! >:(
- The lede as a whole is sub-par and rather chunky. It really doesn't elaborate much on the storm's causes for development and seems rather hard to read. You mentioned many damage totals in the impact section, yet none are mentioned in the lede. You don't mention any damage other than those to residences, either, while the impact section notes significant damage to crops.
- Because it's the lead, not the body. However, I totally forgot about those damage totals. I think I added them
- The MH is almost all statistical and goes into little meteorological depth. The 1982 TCR mentions details such as a strong mid- and upper-level circulation encouraging Karen's intensification, a monsoonal flow, and damage to 185 square miles of "winter rice crops". It also gives a death total and number of homeless, yet the article incorporates none of these details and is essentially a somewhat incoherent rant about the best track. This is all on pages 106 and 107.
- The MH section also repeats the same abbreviations awfully frequently – each sentence seems to mention either "JMA" or "JTWC," and elaborates only with intensity, changes in strength, winds, pressure, and time. The lack of meteorological details and redundancy is frustrating.
- "rendered as missing due to the storm" is an extremely strange wording.
- "35,7444 residents"? What the heck?
- "Karen"? This is about Nancy.
- In general, references should follow punctuation.
- It kinda does here. YE Pacific Hurricane 19:14, 1 January 2014 (UTC)
- United States Airforce → United States Air Force
- In general, the prose throughout the article is not all that well-written and the article is far from comprehensive. The MH is essentially written as if raw data is being rewritten into paragraph form. There's so much more meteorological in the report you cited that was never mentioned.
In general, while the article is well-cited, its prose is substandard and does not utilize the sourced content well, and as such, I'm regretfully failing this. Sorry, YE. Cloudchased (talk) 15:08, 1 January 2014 (UTC)
- Why can't you leave it on hold; if you are "reretfully" failing this :P Okay, in all seriosuness, I fully understand why you chose to fail this review and I could be wrong here, but I don't think you've looked at very many non-WHEM articles. However, some of the issues here anre totally my fault (in particular the one about the damage totals not being in the lead). There were tons of other issues (no Vietnam impact in lead, capitalization issues that you did not point out), and I thank you for trying to keep the number of comments here limited. Happy News Years! YE Pacific Hurricane 19:14, 1 January 2014 (UTC)
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Also, check out JR's link, and give the entire article a very thorough copyedit, and I'll take another look at it. Cloudchased (talk) 19:31, 1 January 2014 (UTC)