Talk:Typhoon Irma (1981)

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More organization and info. Hurricanehink (talk) 16:19, 8 June 2006 (UTC)

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 22:25, 8 May 2014 (UTC)

• I'm gonna have to call shenanigans for the first sentence. It was only a C2. Betty in the previous year was a C3 at Philippine landfall.
  • Changed. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}
• "The twenty-fifth named storm, fourteenth typhoon, and second super typhoon of the near-average 1981 Pacific typhoon season" - this is a long beginning to the sentence. I'd cut "near average"
  • Cut that and the super typhoon bit. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:20, 8 May 2014 (UTC)
• "Irma reached its peak wind speed of 205 km/h (125 mph)" - so this is per JMA, right? If so, you should clarify, as the mention of "super typhoon" earlier implies it uses JTWC winds.
  • Removed the super typhoon mention. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:20, 8 May 2014 (UTC)
• What is Malia, linked in the lede? There is no mention of Philippines there. Do you mean Manila?
  • Yes. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:20, 8 May 2014 (UTC)
• "Nearly 40,000 people were homeless. Irma destroyed or damaged 119,233 dwellings." - these are too short and choppy. Try merging.
  • Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}
• "150th meridian east and the 170th meridian east" - why do you mention the longitude? That means nothing to most people.
  • What else should I mention? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:20, 8 May 2014 (UTC)
• "After passing north of Guam, both agencies upgraded Irma into a tropical storm." - the agencies passed north of Guam?
  • Reworked. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:20, 8 May 2014 (UTC)
• "Thereafter, Irma turned east as a subtropical ridge built north and northwest of the storm" - the track doesn't suggest this.
  • It's west now :P YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:20, 8 May 2014 (UTC)
• "and the later reporting winds" - I think you mean "latter"
  • True statement. It has been corrected. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:20, 8 May 2014 (UTC)
• "as Irma neared landfall" - there a reason why this sentence begins lowercase?
  • Corrected. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:20, 8 May 2014 (UTC)
• "Virtually every house was demolished due to storm surge in Benagaspasan,[13] a small town with a population 1,000.[14] A total of 47 killed in the village. Thirty-seven were injured in Bengaspasan as well." - I feel like these three sentences could be killed.
  • No way. That's where arguably the worst effects were. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:20, 8 May 2014 (UTC)
• "One army officer noted that died via electrocution while trying to fix the roof of his dwelling[19] in Makati." - poor grammar here, not sure what's going on.
  • Better? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:20, 8 May 2014 (UTC)
• The pic in the impact section should be right-aligned to alternate with the storm path map.
  • Fine. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:20, 8 May 2014 (UTC)
• I kinda feel like Death by coconut should be linked here - "...and a farmer in Quezon died after being hit by a falling coconut."
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}
• Does flooding really have to be linked?
  • Removed. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:20, 8 May 2014 (UTC)
• "The majority of huts were flattened." - where?
  • Axed with my hammer. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:20, 8 May 2014 (UTC)
• "sustained little damaged" - grammar
  • Fixed. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:20, 8 May 2014 (UTC)
• "Seventy-two others were wounded." - I don't get why this is placed where it is. Why not put it where you mention the deaths?
  • Moved. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:20, 8 May 2014 (UTC)
• "The decaying remnants of Irma then 105 to 150 mm (5 to 5 in) of rain and winds of up to 72 km/h (45 mph) to Okinawa." - missing verb
  • Added. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:20, 8 May 2014 (UTC)

All in all, a decent article, but there are some issues. Lemme know when you take care of these. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 22:25, 8 May 2014 (UTC)