Talk:Sorry Mrs. Carter/GA1

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Cartoon network freak in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 22:10, 4 December 2016 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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  • The song was released On August 4, 2014 → It was released on August 4, 2014, through XY (platform, which way?)
  • remix of the single → Remove overfluous "the"
  • "Flawless" → add year of release in brackets
  • In the lyrics, Liv portrays herself → The track's lyrical content portrays Liv
  • Liv rapped the lyrics → present tense
  • The video has earned over two million views less than a week after its release. → The visual has earned...
  • The song was listed as one of the top ten → "Sorry Mrs. Carter" was listed in the top ten of
  • for the weeks of August 9, 2014 and August 23, 2014 → for two weeks in 2014 (too detailed for lead section)

Infobox

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  • flawless ;)

Concept and development

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  • the song, promoting it as an → the song as an
  • she explained that she recorded the song → the rapper explained that she recorded the track
  • "Flawless" → add year of release in brackets
  • Liv uploaded the song only "a few days" after the release of the "Flawless" remix. → Subsequently, Liv uploaded her song only a few days after the release of the "Flawless" remix.
  • Prior to the song's release → Prior to the recording's premiere (word repetition)
  • Unlink "tabloids" here
  • Kendrick Lamar.[8] According to Bustle, "The Invasion" is "[Liv's] quest → Kendrick Lamar, which—according to Bustle—portrays "[Liv's] quest

Composition and lyrical interpretation

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  • forty-four seconds → 44 seconds
  • The beat → Its beat
  • single "Ms. Jackson".[13] Tim Surrette of TV Guide noted that the use of the sample was extremely prominent. → single "Ms. Jackson" (YEAR OF RELEASE), whose use ... described as being extremely prominent.
  • Liv details her past relationship with rapper Jay Z → wait? Did she really have a relationship with him? I'm a little bit confused because in the lead you say "alleged relationship"
  • Throughout the song, she portrays herself → Throughout the song, she is further portrayed
  • toward both artists → towards both artists
  • which includes: "I was → including, "I was
  • The lyrics contain → The lyrical content contains (word repetition)
  • "I Just Wanna Love U (Give It 2 Me)", and "99 Problems", "Girls, Girls, Girls" → year of release in brackets to all + enlist them correctly with the "and" placed at the end
  • year of release to Beyoncé's songs as well.
  • In the song, Liv denies → In the track, the rapper denies
  • intimacy; she does this by rapping lyrics such as → intimacy by rapping lyrics such as,
  • Unlink "chorus" both here and in the audio file description
  • include: "Why → include, "Why
  • Beyoncé. It ends with Liv saying "The → Beyoncé, and ends with Live saying, "The

Critical reception

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  • negative responses → singular form
  • the side chick. Carter followed → the side chick, with him following
  • the lyrics "You got → the lyrics, "You got
  • viewed the song → viewed the track (alternation)
  • Bustle's Kaitlin Reilly → Echoing this thought, Bustle's Kaitlin Reilly
  • The single was described → The recording was described (alternation)
  • Beyoncé's fans negatively → The singer's fans also negatively
  • referenced in the song → referenced in the track (alternation)
  • however, called the song → Remove "however"
  • Place this last para between the second and the third one, please

Music video

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  • The music video → An accompanying music video for the single
  • Link "YouTube" to its respective article on Wikipedia
  • the video was "homemade" with → the visual was homemade, with the rapper
  • a bikini and shawl and drinking wine → a bikini and shawl, and drinking wine (as a new idea starts here in the sentence)
  • prominently throughout the video.[14] One of the magazine clippings includes → prominently throughout the video, with one of the including
  • The video ends → The clip ends (word rep.)
  • The video has earned → It has earned
  • viewed the video → viewed the visual (word rep.)
  • It was regraded → It was further regraded
  • Kaitlin Reilly. Reilly concluded → Kaitlin Reilly, who concluded

Release history

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  • Use "scope="row" for "Country"
  • Unlink formats and label

Other stuff

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Copy-violation

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Images and others

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  • Article is perfectly illustrated by audio sample.
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References

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  • Avoid shouting in ref 1
  • As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article.

@Aoba47: Ping me when you're ready with this. Best regards and good luck, Cartoon network freak (talk) 23:06, 4 December 2016 (UTC)Reply

@Aoba47: Oh, so you're still here? Cartoon network freak (talk) 23:36, 4 December 2016 (UTC)Reply
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