Talk:Sky Fits Heaven/GA1

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Aoba47 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) Aoba47 (talk) 03:15, 26 November 2016 (UTC)Reply

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  • I believe the format in the infobox more so refers to the format in which the song was made available to the public. I would exchange remix for 12" and CD single as the remix was made available through those means.
  • The wording of this sentence sounds somewhat incorrect: “Written and produced by Madonna and Patrick Leonard, the remix contained additional production from William Orbit, and lyrical interpretation from British poet Max Blagg’s 1992 poem, What Fits?.” The sentence can be read as the remix adding in the lyrical interpretation rather than it already being a part of the original. I would rephrase or turn the poem part into its own sentence to avoid confusion.
  • I am a little confused by the second sentence of the first paragraph of the “Background and controversy” section. It makes it sound like there are two separate advertisements, one discussed in the first sentence with the jeans, and another shown on NBC. After looking at the source, I thought it was referring to one series of advertisements. I would suggest revising this to make that more clear, or letting me know if I am incorrect (I could be missing something obvious).
  • It should be “While composing her” not “During composing her”.
  • I am confused by the first sentence of the second paragraph of the “Remixes and chart performance” section. Do you mean “Since it was not released as a commercial single or selected for radio airplay”? The use of “Despite not” does not make sense to me in this context.
  • Include an ALT description for the image in the “Critical reception” section.
  • Revise the first sentence of the “Live performances” section. The phrase “made a number of televised appearances and live performances of the album's songs” does not match this article.
  • Remove the “as noted by AllMusic’s Clive Young” part as it sounds awkward and you can just use the reference. Move the identification and wikilink with Young to the following sentence.
  • Please include a “Formats and track listings” section and put the information about the CD single and vinyl mention in the “Remixes and chart performance” section.
  • Again, remix is not a format. Remix package is a format, but not remix. Instead, put the vinyl and CD single information here, as well as the demo CD.

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