Talk:Sheffield Digital Campus
Latest comment: 16 years ago by Lewisskinner in topic Tone
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Tone edit
The wording seems a bit biased and overly descriptive. Lex Kitten 11:12, 23 October 2007 (UTC)
- I take your point about tone, but wikification? L.J.Skinnerwot|I did 11:33, 23 October 2007 (UTC)
- Hey, thanks for the reply.
- Here's an example of what I mean about the tone- "Sheffield's digital and creative business sectors are already a fast-growing sector, with the CIQ really pushing for an increase in the sector"
- It just sounds a wee bit like an add, if you know what I mean. Though I can see it's hard to talk about a future project without using that kind of language.
- In terms of wikification, I think the article needs more structure. Like, maybe a section on Sheffield's background, and a section on the design of the digital campus, or something? I think that will make the article easier to read, and also help it read less like an ad. Lex Kitten 23:58, 24 October 2007 (UTC)
- OK, the design should be no problem, though how I'll get an image I don't know (I've had this problem is articles like NRQ, St Paul's Tower etc - they're all copyrighted). As for Sheffield's background, see Sheffield or History of Sheffield. Both featured articles! L.J.Skinnerwot|I did 08:56, 25 October 2007 (UTC)