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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 03:56, 1 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

  • Infobox: Add "running time" to the infobox, it is not N/A
  • Lede: of the WB original series Smallville. → of the science fiction fantasy drama Smallville.
    I originally had this, but then an editor (who has worked on more Smallville articles than I) removed it, so I won't fight it.--Gen. Quon (talk) 14:23, 1 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
    I put in "superhero television series, because it is the most encompassing, but I think that 1 genre is the max when it comes to writing a sentence describing a show. The infobox for the series as a whole can list the other subgenres for a reader.  BIGNOLE  (Contact me) 14:32, 1 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • Lede: Per above: It premiered on American television on January 26, 2006 and subsequently was boar cast in the United Kingdom on March 27 → It premiered on The WB in the United States on January 26, 2006 and was subsequently boar cast in the United Kingdom on March 27, 2006: Unless I'm wrong for year at end
  • Lede: What channel what it on in the United Kingdom, Sky1?, BBC?, ITV?
  • Lede: Link Nielsen household rating to Nielsen ratings
  • Lede: being watched by 6.28 million people. Change people to viewers.
  • Lede: The episode received mostly positive reviews from critics → The episode received mostly positive reviews from television commentators
  • Production: Writing — Double Wording - Michael Roberts called the the script "a great episode" and noted that "the conceit is really cool → Michael Roberts called the script "a great episode" and noted that "the conceit is really cool". — You don't need the word "the" twice
  • Production: Filming and effects — Image - The scene featuring Lana's (Kristin Kreuk) death was carefully choreographed.., You don't need to dots
  • Broadcast and reception: In first sentence, unlink United States, per WP:MOS
  • Broadcast and reception: "Reckoning" first aired in the United States on January 26, 2006 on The WB → "Reckoning" first premiered in the United States on January 26, 2006 on The WB
  • Broadcast and reception: "Reckoning" received mostly positive reviews from critics. → "Reckoning" received mostly positive reviews from television commentators
  • Broadcast and reception: . Michael Ausiello from TV Guide Online → Michael Ausiello from TV Guide. — Really, TV Guide Online?
  • Footnotes: Ref. 4 — Smallville: The Complete FifthSeason → Smallville: The Complete Fifth Season
  • Footnotes: Ref. 13 — Smallville: The Complete Sixth Season link to Smallville (season 6), not season 5 of the series
  • Footnotes: Ref. 19 — publisher TV Guide instead of TV Guide Online
  • External links: Remove Official and Additional, unneeded
  • External links: Smallville on YTV (Canada)Smallville at YTV.com
  • External links: IMDb link - Remove Tempest, what is that

On hold. Good work. Tate Brandley Stockwell 03:56, 1 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

I believe I've addressed all the concerns. Thank you for the review.--Gen. Quon (talk) 13:54, 1 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
I removed the genre selection from the lead. The show has too many genre classifications to be putting that in an episode lead. It's not like we're talking a straight "drama", or "science fiction", or "action", or whatever here. The main page does not even identify genres in the lead, but leaves it to the infobox, because it looks unprofessional to rattle off multiple qualifiers in a single sentence like that.  BIGNOLE  (Contact me) 14:17, 1 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
I agree, and, like I said, you're more knowledgeable than I on this matter.--Gen. Quon (talk) 14:29, 1 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
I have made some final minor tweaks, and then this article is ready to be promoted. Yeah! Tate Brandley Stockwell 15:27, 1 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
I have removed YTV link completed it doesn't link to the episode, it is to the series. Tate Brandley Stockwell 15:27, 1 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for the review!--Gen. Quon (talk) 15:32, 1 June 2012 (UTC)Reply