Talk:Migrant caregivers in Taiwan

Latest comment: 6 months ago by MinaBrs in topic Grammar typos

Missing sources

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In the beginning there are statistical info that are missing sources. For example, in the background part there is no source at all. Pitonakova.anezka (talk) 02:50, 8 December 2023 (UTC)Reply


Introduction

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The second paragraph (as of now) seems interesting but not necessarily like something to put in an introduction Totoro in Taiwan (talk) 02:52, 8 December 2023 (UTC)Reply

General Comments

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"administrative support for foreign workers is very extensive" -- this may sound like an opinion. use more neutral language?

the entry ban needs some more explanation, if it is to be mentioned.

'filial piety', not filialpiet

' According to a survey at 2013' needs source and citation.

Demographics should include more recent data

"Work setting" addresses some important issues but it is not clear how it is "Work setting" related. Consider restructuring and rewriting for more neutral and factual tone.


Workers unions info is great to include, please expand --ian


Upon reading the entire first section, I think that the information is very interesting but might not be the first thing people would want to know about Migrant Caregivers in Taiwan. Maybe a section for that information itself might me interesting and get you a better structure. Totoro in Taiwan (talk) 02:57, 8 December 2023 (UTC)Reply
You might want to edit some parts of the article to make them sound less colloquial. Totoro in Taiwan (talk) 03:27, 8 December 2023 (UTC)Reply

Grammar typos

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Just a small grammar typos: Vietnameses > Vietnamese (History paragraph), filialpiet > filial piety (Social&culture background paragraph) , differents > different (Work setting), foreing > foreign

Cotětosakrazajímá (talk) 02:55, 8 December 2023 (UTC)Reply

There also seem to be a few small errors with singularity and plurality (e.g. foreign worker_ and local workers) Totoro in Taiwan (talk) 03:08, 8 December 2023 (UTC)Reply
Also, in the background second paragraph, "wailao," > "wailao", (I suppose), also maybe add the chinese characters associated to it ? MinaBrs (talk) 03:12, 8 December 2023 (UTC)Reply
filialpiet -> filial piety; you can also add a link to its wikipedia article https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Filial_piety Totoro in Taiwan (talk) 03:13, 8 December 2023 (UTC)Reply
In the "Work setting" section, fourth paragraph typo: "resuls" > "results" MinaBrs (talk) 03:35, 8 December 2023 (UTC)Reply
in "work setting" last paragraph, missing space here between the two sentences: "...who will return to their home countries after the contract period ends.However, criticism..." MinaBrs (talk) 03:40, 8 December 2023 (UTC)Reply
Issues and challenge last paragraph: "lobor" > "labor" MinaBrs (talk) 03:46, 8 December 2023 (UTC)Reply


Background section

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Maybe reformulate the end of the second paragraph ("Additionally, it's worth noting that some Vietnamese nationals acquire Taiwanese nationality through marriage, which adds complexity to the accuracy of the statistics."), is it only Vietnamese or mostly Vietnamese workers ? Maybe reformulate to make more general ("Many foreign workers (precise here on vietnamese if there is a specificity) marry Taiwanese nationals, and thus acquire the Taiwanese nationality. Those evolution of those statitstics thus not only evolve through the come and go of foreign workers, but also through marriage, and some former foreign workers acquiring Taiwanese nationality" or something like that ? MinaBrs (talk) 03:19, 8 December 2023 (UTC)Reply

Regarding the "Social & Cultural background" section, it is interesting and very important, but can maybe be condensed or reformulated, as it repeats itself a lot. I think it would gain in lisibility to go straight to the points, without often repeating the confucean tradition of taking care of parents, it can be stated only once, or twice if needed to reprecise it with new information in the section. MinaBrs (talk) 03:29, 8 December 2023 (UTC)Reply

Demographics section

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Maybe more statistics can be added here, and some statistics of other paragraphs can be moved here, for better visibility (I think some users would only look into the demographics section of your article if they are looking for stats, and not read the whole article carefully. So it would be more usefull to have all the important demographic stats there) MinaBrs (talk) 03:31, 8 December 2023 (UTC)Reply

Work setting section

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In the fifth paragraph, maybe the word "burden" is not neutral enough to describe the shift from public to private ? MinaBrs (talk) 03:38, 8 December 2023 (UTC)Reply

Issues and Challenge section

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In the first paragraph, you state that naturalisation is not possible for migrant domestic workers. However, you stated in the end of the Background section paragraph 2 that they could gain Taiwanese nationality through marriage. Is it me misunderstanding ? If not, I think you should clarify MinaBrs (talk) 03:43, 8 December 2023 (UTC)Reply