Talk:In the Company of a Poet

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 04:08, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
Nominator: Nicholas Michael Halim (talk · contribs) at 08:19, 26 August 2021 (UTC)

GA criteria

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Comments

Prose

• containing her extensive interview — I'd remove 'extensive'
• with the Indian filmmaker, lyricist, and poet Gulzar. — suggesting "with Gulzar, an Indian filmmaker, lyricist, and poet."
• Dina, British India (now Pakistan) — missing MOS:GEOCOMMA (both in the lead and in the prose)
• "Top 10 in Indian Non-fiction Books" — I'd remove the quotes
• and the journalist — remove 'the'
• lyricist, poet and screenwriter — comma after 'poet'
• "Summary" — Shouldn't the title be "Synopsis". I am not sure, though.
• into a Sikh family — "in a Sikh family"
• "now Pakistan" in lead v. "(present-day Pakistan)" in prose. — suggesting to be consistent.
• and had married for three times (producing a son and two daughters from a first marriage with Raaj) — remove 'for', and replace 'producing' with 'having'
• who later become — "who later became"
• Gulzar says to Kabir — convert to past tense
• as his mother was died — remove 'was'
• after giving birth to him — as we have mentioned that Gulzar is the only child, 'to him' could be removed.
• how he wrote his first poet — first poet?
• when he was at the age of ten — should be "at age ten"
• and later starts — "and later started"
• Gulzar married to the actress — remove 'to the'
• I know that summary/synopsis usually doesn't require a citation, but as most all of this is Gulzar's biography, can we get a source at the end verifying everything? Upto you though.
• Movie Mahal — Is 'Movie' part of the title? If not, it should not be in italics.
• "Nasreen Munni Kabir" is repeated many times. Can just write "Kabir" for her.
• Nasreen Munni Kabir asked for help from the journalist Khalid Mohamed to invite people who had significantly involved in the industry. — Odd wording. Specify: which indistry? "who had significantly involved in the" is missing "been". Also, who are characterized as being "significantly" involved? What is significant?
• on Pali Hill — specify the city.
• this time on — remove 'this time'
• the playback singer — I'd remove 'the'
• Kabir recounted he came up insightful information about the singer — odd phrasing. Who is "he" here? Also, it is missing a few words.

@Nicholas Michael Halim – I'll stop here and continue with it later. We could really get some dedicated copy-editing. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:18, 3 January 2022 (UTC)

@Kavyansh.Singh: Done. —Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 09:31, 3 January 2022 (UTC)

• from their previous rendezvous — rephrase 'rendezvous'
• "[preposterously] as this might sound", "no matter how overly dramatic the whole might seem to him" — we will need citations immediately after these quotes
• once more after she arriving in India. — replace "arriving" with "arrives"
• In the end of 2010, — "In late 2010,"
• so they avoid — start as a new sentence, and remove 'so'
• "I also believed that even if we were to revisit events that were already known, [Gulzar] would shed new light on them from the perspective of who he is today." — we will need citations immediately after the quote
• at his office — specify Gulzar
• "If you haven't read any of the books centered on Gulzar yet, this one—though not the best of the lot—could still be your pick!" — we will need citations immediately after the quote
• The Hindustan Times' Deepa Gahlot — "The Hindustan Times' journalist(??) Deepa Gahlot "
• "flips from films to individuals without a pause, from people to poetry with the finesse of a trapeze artiste" — we will need citations immediately after the quote
• The table needs a caption, preferably using the {{sronly}} template.

Images

• Images can take ALT text
• Images, including the non-free-one are fine.

References

• Can link The Hindu and Rupa Publications in all citations.

That is it. Putting on hold. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 10:04, 3 January 2022 (UTC)

@Kavyansh.Singh: Done. —Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 10:18, 3 January 2022 (UTC)

Passing. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 16:32, 3 January 2022 (UTC)

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