Talk:In My City/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kailash29792 (talk · contribs)
I will be reviewing this within the next 24 hours. Kailash29792 (talk) 13:27, 25 March 2014 (UTC)

Lead

• Seems all well, but there is one bare reference in the third para. I don't even think it needs to be there, as this states that the lead section does not need sources.
•  Done: Removed.—Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)

• Although the lead has three paragraphs (which is suitable enough), is it possible to extend the first and third para's? If not, never mind.
•  Done: Extended a bit.—Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)

• "one group complemented Chopra's vocals, while the other group criticised the generic sound of the song." Who are the groups?
•  Done: Tweaked.—Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)

Critical reception

• The majority of reviews, such as Janhvi Patel's review and The Hindu do not contain any quotations by the reviewers. I believe some can be added.

I think its has adequate quotes.—Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)

• Is Bollywood Life a reliable source? If yes, then it can stay.

Yes, It is reliable. Its a part of Zee News and DNA.—Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)

Commercial performance

• "In My City" was a commercially successful in India. What grammar is that?

• I feel this section needs only a little more minor copyediting.
•  Done: Tweaked.—Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)

Promotions

• Is there any better name for this section? Or is this the best that can be? Or will "Marketing" do?

• Are you intending on creating an article on DJ Nash? If not, please remove the link as it is red.
•  Done: Removed redlinks and i didn't found a better name as Chopra was promoting. So, i think it fair.—Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)

Music video

• A behind-the-scenes video documenting the making of "In My City" was shown during an NFL game on 13 September 2012. "behind-the-scenes" sounds colloquial, and the term is not in the supporting source. Also, is there any alternative for the term "shown" which sounds juvenile?

• The video (directed by Joseph Kahn) was released on 29 January 2013. I'd prefer The video, directed by Joseph Kahn, was released on 29 January 2013.

• I would like the term BMW linked, as it refers to a fancy car that is not known to just everyone.
•  Done: Tweaked.—Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)

Overall

These are the only comments I have. Once they have been resolved, the article can pass. Other minor issues have been taken care of by me. Kailash29792 (talk) 08:54, 26 March 2014 (UTC)

Final verdict

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Congratulations Prashant! I'm also happy that I could finish this review in less than 24 hours. Kailash29792 (talk) 12:00, 26 March 2014 (UTC)