Talk:Ilomilo (song)/GA2

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Kyle Peake in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 07:49, 5 May 2020 (UTC)Reply


Good Article review progress box
Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

Coming later today --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:49, 5 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Infobox and lead

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  • Remove source used to verify the length
  • Should just be O'Connell under producer since we already know his forename
  • "The track was sent to" → "The song was sent to"
  • "Universal Music Group as the record's seventh" → "Universal Music Group, as the album's seventh"
  • "co-wrote "Ilomilo"," → "co-wrote it,"
  • "handled its production" → "handled the production"
  • "instrumentation, "Ilomilo" was heavily" → "instrumentation, the song was heavily"
  • Put the target to the puzzle video game on the four words "of the same name"
  • "It also references" → "The former also references"
  • "predecessor on the album" → "predecessor on the track list" to avoid re-instating the album in this para
  • "addresses several lyrical topics" → "addresses several lyrical topics within "Ilomilo""
  • "whilst her distorted and stuttering" → "while her distorted and stuttering"
  • ""Ilomilo" was performed live" → "the song was performed live"
  • "Eilish's 2019 When We All Fall Asleep Tour and 2020 Where Do We Go? World Tour," → "Eilish's When We All Fall Asleep Tour and Where Do We Go? World Tour in 2019 and 2020, respectively."
  • "as well as released an animated visualizer for on April 24, 2020." → "On April 24, 2020, an animated visualizer was released for the song."
  • Are you sure higher chart positions shouldn't be mentioned in the lead?
  • "Canada and the United States" → "Canada, and the United States"

  Done

Background

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  Done

Composition and lyrical interpretation

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  • AllMusic should not have a space within it
  • It is Jon Pareles not John Pareles and use the appropriate wikilink
  • "to sound like she" → "to sound as if she"
  • "and is played over" → "and it is played over"
  • Put the wikilink to the video game on "of the same name"
  • "is to reunite two" → "is reuniting two" since to and two close together doesn't read well in prose
  • "have associated the text" → "have associated the lyrical content" to specify what text you are referring to
  • "and to suicidal thoughts" → "and suicidal thoughts"
  • "reference "Bury a Friend" (2019)" → "reference the single "Bury a Friend" (2019)"
  • "its predecessor on" → "the song's predecessor on"
  • ""Bury a Friend" in turn ends → "the former in turn ends" to avoid stating the title too much
  • "in an MTV interview" → "in an interview with MTV"
  • "who called it" → "who called the track"
  • "With the availability of" → "Following the availability of"
  • "On the same occasion" → "At the same time"
  • "The song also reached modest peaks..." too many refs at the end of this sentence, so add them after each country: "Australia,[15] Canada,[16]" etc.
  • "It has notably been awarded gold certifications" → "It has since been certified gold"
  • "was released on Eilish's" → "was released to Eilish's"
  • "in June" → "in June of that year"
  • "Whilst performed at" → "While it was performed by her at"
  • "in August" → "in August 2019"
  • "the singer further performed" → "Eilish further performed"
  • "In April 2020" → "In April of that year"

  Done

Credits and personnel

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  • Any specific order here?

  Done Sorted by last names. Cartoon network freak (talk) 16:29, 5 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Charts

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  • Good

Certifications

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  • Good

References

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  • May want to run the tool again as some refs appear to not be archived
  • Copyvio score looks fairly good
  • Remove Tidal from ref 3's title since it is cited as the publisher
  • Ref 5 should cite Pareles, Jon as author instead
  • PopBuzz should not be italicised on ref 9
  • The author for ref 12 is not formatted in the consistent manner with the rest of the article
  • Remove ref 14 per WP:RSP
  • Missing accessdate for ref 22
  • Refs 24 and 26 are from an unreliable source

Final comments and verdict

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  On hold for a week, as you will be able to fix the changes in that time. --Kyle Peake (talk) 15:43, 5 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

@Kyle Peake: Thank you very much for the review! Your comments have been solved. Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:27, 5 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
@Cartoon network freak: You still have not removed the unreliable Forbes ref --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:11, 6 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
@Kyle Peake: My bad, I forgot to. I found a better source (Insider) now. Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:33, 6 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

@Cartoon network freak:  Pass on this now, thanks for co-operating and good to hear from you again! --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:58, 6 May 2020 (UTC)Reply