Talk:Eric Chappelow/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Peacemaker67 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 08:12, 19 September 2020 (UTC)Reply


Interesting subject. A few comments:

Lead and infobox
  • I don't see the justification for the citations in the lead, per MOS:CITELEAD. There is no material that is challenged or likely to be challenged, or direct quotations involved. The facts are cited in the body and frankly, they are uncontroversial
  • suggest "whose arrest, imprisonment, and harsh treatment during that period..."→"whose arrest and harsh treatment during four months imprisonment..."
  • "It was a newsworthy event that drew the attention of Chappelow's connections"
  • "and led to a campaign for his release joined by such notable personalities as"
  • suggest "His arrest and the treatment he received was highlighted in the House of Commons by the Liberal [[Member of Parliament (United Kingdom)|MP]] Philip Morrell." with the existing links retained, of course
  • "it was rescinded and he was arrested in April for refusing to serve"
  • "in the custody of Philip Morrell and Lady Ottoline Morrell"
  • "to serve in a Friends' Ambulance Unit in England."
  • the caption of the infobox image is confusing, he is not to Massingham's right, he is to his left. Suggest "Eric Chappelow (right), photographed by Philip Morrell in 1916"
  • Given he was British, the death date in the infobox should be DMY
  • Should his nationality be United Kingdom or British? I would have thought the latter was more correct?

More to come. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:58, 19 September 2020 (UTC)Reply

Body
  • Always provide and cite the person's full name at the beginning of the body of a bio article
  • link suffragist
  • "in the literary magazine The Athenæum"
  • even though it is a quotation, some linking is needed for unfamiliar terms, suggest linking metrical to Metre (poetry), and villanelle
  • for "compulsory service in WWI, link Military Service Act 1916
  • link conscientious objector at first mention, unlink later one
  • for Barnes, link Barnes, London, and Mortlake
  • watch the US spellings, offenses→offences
  • April 14, 1916→14 April 1916
  • "the national tabloid newspaper, the Daily Sketch"
  • suggest "a friend of the pacifist Bertrand Russell"
  • "Bertrand Russell "took up his case with various influential people""
  • "including the scholar Gilbert Murray"
  • "The poet W. B. Yeats"
  • "to ask the playwright George Bernard Shaw"
  • "Chappelow inwithin the government"
  • per MOS:ITAL, italicise La Marseillaise and drop the quote marks
  • "When Bertrand Russell was himself"
  • "The Home Front, the suffragist Sylvia Pankhurst"
  • I think his fellowship in the Royal Society for Arts should be mentioned in the lead
  • "Chappelow won the British Annual of Literature"
  • combine the last two paras and insert his date of death into the text, as it is otherwise uncited
  • London is duplinked in the final sentence
  • it would be preferable for verification purposes to add the publisher, location and isbn/oclc of the print sources
  • I'm going to call in my go-to-gal on image licensing regarding the infobox image. Nikkimaria, would you mind giving me your opinion on the licensing of File:Eric Chappelow in 1916.jpg? Thanks. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:27, 20 September 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Not sure where the CC BY tag is coming from, as I don't see that licensing at the source site. Assuming I'm not just overlooking it, this would need a US PD tag of some kind in order to be included. Nikkimaria (talk) 13:05, 20 September 2020 (UTC)Reply

That's it, great job on this. Placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:27, 20 September 2020 (UTC)Reply

A number of the print sources are relatively old magazines rather than books, so I don't think those have ISBN numbers. There is one unpublished source, The Chappelow Family With a Brief Beardslee Genealogy, which I use only for the point that Chappelow was fired from his government job after going to prison. It does have a WorldCat listing. I think this is a noncontroversial point (it seems obvious that he would be, I just couldn't find it said anywhere else), though the article will survive just fine without if necessary. BD2412 T 22:17, 20 September 2020 (UTC)Reply
It isn't necessary to do this now, but generally you should try to use one format for citations, eg not a mix of plain ref tags and cite templates, per WP:CITEVAR. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:16, 21 September 2020 (UTC)Reply