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Overall the draft is looking good. I would address some awkward phrasing and word choices throughout the final draft. Some of the words you've used can be changed for more descriptive (but still neutral) language. I think a section specifically on her awards would really help sell her as an important figure in sports climbing. Really interesting so far!Syoung18 (talk) 18:38, 27 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

It sounds like her climb on Everest could be its own section entirely. Are there any sources where you could back up some of your facts with quotes from Emily? I think fleshing out this section would really help make the article more substantial. 174.34.28.252 (talk) 19:03, 27 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

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