Talk:Diane E. Pataki

Latest comment: 5 years ago by Waterbarnes in topic Becca's comments

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You should have more references for each bit of new information. You can create a reference list by going to insert > more > references list. the footnote numbers can be created by the "cite" button.

Lead I feel like the sentence about her position as a professor should be the first sentence "Human comfort" is kind of an unclear phrase you wrote "intersection pf environmental costs" "urban and landscaping plans and design" I think this can be condensed

I feel like the positions that you mention right under "Honors" should be in bullet-point form, it just might be more digestible

For the heading "Selected Publication", should that be plural?

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great infobox I think you should remove the "Drs" throughout

intro bit you shouldn't be essentially cutting and pasting from her website - please rephrase the information:

Diane Pataki examines the influence of vegetation and soil processes on the physical environment (e.g. local climate, pollution, water resources, aesthetics, and human comfort). Her research group aims to quantify the environmental costs and benefits of restoring and managing urban landscapes to inform planning and designing choices.

in the piece about where she is working now, hyperlink Univ Utah, Dept of Biology, etc

Early Life & Education you need sources and you need to paraphrase because this is essentially what is on her site.

Honors make this into a bullet pointed list and provide links/citations

Awards provide references

You need to add more about her research and why it is important. What are some of the interesting and novel findings of her research? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Waterbarnes (talkcontribs) 01:46, 16 September 2018 (UTC)Reply

you need a lead — Preceding unsigned comment added by Waterbarnes (talkcontribs) 01:49, 16 September 2018 (UTC)Reply