Talk:Copper Basin (Tennessee)

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Bneu2013 in topic GA Review

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 17:04, 13 April 2020 (UTC)Reply


Opening statement

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In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use  Done,  Fixed, plus Added,  Not done,  Doing..., or minus Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. —♠Vami_IV†♠ 17:04, 13 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

As this the first of the reviewee's articles that I have reviewed, they should note that I am a grammar pendant and will nitpick in the interest of prose quality. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 17:04, 13 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Geography and geology

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  • Do you have any images of the basin from the air or maybe orbit to illustrate the environmental impact of mining operations?
  • Move the image in "Geography and geology" to the right.
  • common borders of Tennessee, North Carolina, and Georgia. What's a common border?
  • has created a reservoir Axe "has".
  • Cleveland, Tennessee metropolitan area Combine these wikilinks into one, or rebuild the sentence.

Pre-mining history

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  • The Copper Basin was known to the Cherokee as Kawa'na.[11] Copper from the basin was used by the Cherokee on a limited basis.[12] It would be nice to know more about the Cherokee's occupation of the basin.

Early mining history

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  • Copper was first discovered in the Copper Basin But the Cherokee were already getting copper from the basin?
    • Comment - I've added "by a European American" to the end of this sentence, as this was the discovery that confirmed to the settlers that there was indeed copper in the basin. Don't know if this is a permanent fix though. From what I can tell from the sources, the Cherokee were aware of the existence of copper in the basin, mining only small quantities, and the European settlers had probably heard rumors copper in the basin, but were not certain of its existence until the 1843 discovery. This will probably take a little more research, though. Bneu2013 (talk) 20:47, 13 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Expansion of mining operations

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  • The strike was settled after the intervention of law enforcement. In whose favor?
  • flotation plant Needs a wikilink to the relevant process.
  • copper sulfate [...] Iron and zinc concentrates Need wikilinks.
  • A sulfuric acid plant was constructed in Copperhill in 1942, and by 1949 liquid sulfuric acid was being produced.[13] The previous sentence was in 1936, and the next in 1937; this sentence should be moved into "Later years".
    •  Fixed - rearranged section below to fit this sentence
  • the TCC was essentially divided when two of the unions joined the American Federation of Labor (AFL), and the other joined the Congress of Industrial Organizations (CIO). Was the company divided or its workers?
  • Both, unions, however, Replace with "The unions".
    •  Done
  • As a result, a six-week strike began on July 14, 1939. What came of the strike? Did any complications arise from the company having two unions? Actually, which one of those two organized this strike?

Environmental issues and reclamation

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  • At first, [...] There's nothing to preface this. I'd remove it.
    •  Done - replaced with "In the early years of the mining operations", since this logging only took place in the early years, and reforestation did not begin until the 1930s. Bneu2013 (talk) 20:20, 25 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • [...] the forests in the Copper Basin were logged to fuel the smelters, and as early as 1861, trees were becoming scarce. In 1876, the companies began importing logs from Fannin County, Georgia. Combine?
  • Due to the removal of the forests, this also resulted in erosion of the topsoil Two layers of redundancy here; try a rewording.
  • which was successfully marketed Unnecessary down here.
  • Two additional Supreme Court cases related to this injunction, Wetmore v. Tennessee Copper Co. and Ladew v. Tennessee Copper Co., both in 1910, followed. Missing a citation and the result of these cases/their impact on Madison v. Ducktown Sulphur, Copper & Iron Company.

Referencing

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One final concern: All of "Further reading" have dedicated Harvard citations, but the article doesn't use Harvard citations. "Further reading" is also a bad name for the bibliography (typically called "References"). I recommend deleting the |ref= parameters (which will save total article size) or converting to Harvard citations (which will of course link directly to the source).♠Vami_IV†♠ 23:13, 25 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

 Done - Vami IV, renamed "Bibliography", and also flipped with references section. Will convert to Harvard citation tl.Bneu2013 (talk) 23:33, 25 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

GA progress

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Pictures relevant and free, article passes copyvio scanner. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 17:04, 13 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Vami IV - I think I've addressed all the issues you listed. Would you mind taking a look at it now? Bneu2013 (talk) 11:28, 24 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
Update - Vami IV - addressed the issues in the last section. Bneu2013 (talk) 21:02, 25 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
Important note - I've also changed and added a few things, mostly in the early mining history section. If you wouldn't mind taking a look at these changes to see if there are any issues. Bneu2013 (talk) 21:50, 25 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
Reviewed, and heartily approved. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 23:08, 25 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
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