Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

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  This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Peer reviewers: Jared Fong.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 19:18, 17 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

In response to the proposed deletion of Collette Divitto page

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I feel this page should not be deleted. I have been working on an updated, less editorializing and more in depth article with further references that I will be uploading later today. This is a notable-subject, and is not simply a light and amusing story but instead a large and known movement that is occurring in the down syndrome community. This is a notable subject and I would appreciate a few more hours to show that by editing this page and uploading a more in depth version. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Halserena (talkcontribs) 10:13, 7 April 2017 (UTC)Reply

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User:Halserena, good start! I did some copyediting and might have left a few templates. Next steps could include an:

  • infobox
  • a more encyclopedic tone
  • categories
  • more references
  • maybe a photo (?)
  • make sure it's not a Wikipedia:Orphan

-Reagle (talk) 13:52, 24 February 2017 (UTC)Reply


Have a look at List_of_people_with_Down_syndrome to get a sense of how to improve the tone of the prose, and to add your subject ot the list. -Reagle (talk) 14:02, 24 February 2017 (UTC)Reply

Peer Review

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I think this is a very interesting topic that has gotten a good amount of local and national publicity. You might want to restructure the categories so that the page feels more substantial. I think that certain parts feel a little bias and could be removed from the page. For example, saying that the CBS story was at first a feel good story but then blew up seems like it could be an opinion. I think that you could add a picture of Collette. I think that if you had more references, the page would look more legitimate and less open for debate. You could also include information like where she was born and what her childhood was like. This will give the viewer a fuller understanding of who she is. Try and stick to an encyclopedic tone and stick to the facts. Something that is minor but i believe that you should wikilink the first time you use "CBS". You end up wikilinking it when you are listing the publications that have featured her segment. You state at the end that she is starting her own website. I am not sure if this is allowed but you might want to link her website to the page? Great job so far and I think that this is someone who deserves a Wikipedia page.Jared Fong (talk) 16:39, 3 March 2017 (UTC)Reply


What I would like to see:
I would like to see (in this article):
List of media publicity, by region.
Fox 25 Boston reported (on 05/17/2018) that Collette had spoken at the United Nations in New York City. Can someone research her media appearances and media coverages that may not hvae shown her directly? Links to remaining (online) videofiles might enhance this article (and set a future standard for future local media celebrity articles.
Who is helping with the business strategy and management, finance and accounting, and human resources? MaynardClark (talk) 02:46, 18 May 2018 (UTC)Reply