Talk:Chillout 05/The Ultimate Chillout/GA1
Latest comment: 4 years ago by Aoba47 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 23:54, 26 September 2019 (UTC)
Lead and infobox edit
- Would it be possible to change this sentence (It is the fourth volume in Nettwerk's The Ultimate Chillout series and was released on June 15, 2004.) to something like (It was released on June 15, 2004 as the fourth volume in Nettwerk's The Ultimate Chillout series) so the information flows a little more cohesively?
- For this part (from a variety of Nettwerk-signed artists and groups), I do not think "a variety of" is really necessary.
- For this part (Some of the acts featured on the installment include), I would remove "featured" as I do not believe it is really necessary, and "features" was already used in the previous sentence so it is a little repetitive to say "featured" here.
- For this sentence (The compilation was released in two unique formats on June 15, 2004, with commercial CDs being available for purchase in Canada and the United States.), I would avoid the "with..." sentence construction if possible. I have been told it is best to avoid this type of sentence construction in articles.
Background and composition edit
- For this part (Many additional installments were created over the years), I do not think "Many" is necessary.
Critical reception edit
- Everything looks good here, although it may be helpful to see if the full quote from AllMusic is really necessary or the part about the starred rating (Ultimately, he awarded the compilation three out of five stars).
Final comments edit
Good job with the article. Once my comments are addressed, I will be more than happy to promote this as a good article. Have a great rest of your day and/or night! Aoba47 (talk) 23:54, 26 September 2019 (UTC)