Talk:Chad Harris-Crane/GA1
Latest comment: 8 years ago by Aoba47 in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 13:14, 18 June 2016 (UTC)
Infobox
edit- Just for stylistic purposes and to keep things consistent, please add a space before "alt1" and add the appropriate amount of spaces in between "alt1" and the equal sign
Lead
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edit- Please insert a comma after "to protect his best friend"
- Please insert a period ("full stop") after "Ethan Winthrop"
Development
editCreation and casting
edit- Please remove the comma after "coastal" as it is describing New England as well
Characterization and cast response
edit- Please insert "his" in between "incestuous relationship with" and "nephew-niece"
- Rest is good! :)
Storylines
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edit- "The possible incestuous implications of Chad's relationship with Whitney serves as his primary storyline on the soap opera." --> "The possible incestuous implications of Chad's relationship with Whitney serves as one of his primary storylines on the soap opera." (I am only changing this because his relationship with Vincent almost seems equally as important, no?)
- Agreed. Thank you for the suggestion! I agree that both relationships are equally important to his character.
- The rest is this section is really good!
Impact and reception
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edit- Since "Chad's relationship with Whitney" doesn't really get into "fan" specifics, I'd remove the mention of the relationship being reviewing negatively from fans; definitely keep "media outlets", but not fans
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edit- Please link "CBS"
- Please link "ABC" to the article for "American Broadcasting Company"
Other appearances
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edit- How would you feel if you added "jokingly" in between ", McHale" and "asks "so your..."?
End of GA Review:
editAnother good one, and the last from Passions? For now at least? On hold for seven days; contact me if you have any questions or comments. Thanks, Carbrera (talk) 22:02, 18 June 2016 (UTC).
- @Carbrera: Thank you for your review as always! This will be my final expansion and nomination relationg Passions for a while (I am going to take a break from it for a little while). I thought it would be awesome to try and make a good topic out of the Russell family to get some sort of recognition on here for this soap opera (I honestly didn't expect to make it all the way lol). Thank you for your help and reviewing a lot of the pages. As always, let me know if there is anything else I can do. Aoba47 (talk) 22:24, 18 June 2016 (UTC)