Talk:Bizounce/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 03:00, 19 May 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

• Remove the "Border" parameter if it remains empty

 Done

• Add any dates or studios where recording sessions occurred under "Recorded" (if known, of course)

• I should be able to find this out hopefully from the album's liner notes. I'll have to find them (I own a physical copy of the CD; I just have to find it somewhere lol). I will have this up in a couple days. I will also update the "Credits" section to match the liner notes. Aoba47 (talk) 06:01, 29 May 2016 (UTC)

• Remove "Certification" parameter please

 Done

Lead

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• Good work!

• Thank you!

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• Lead sentence should be ""Bizounce" received primarily positive reviews from music critics, who praised Olivia's vocals, image, and its choice as her debut single."

 Done

• You can remove the first 'chart' after "Billboard Hot 100"

 Done

• Could you reword the sentence to this: ""Bizounce" is Olivia's most successful solo single, leaving her 2005 collaboration with rapper 50 Cent on "Candy Shop" as her most successful overall." I don't know if the mention of it being number one is necessary, since the article is primarily about "Bizounce". What do you think?

• I agree. I prefer the way you phrased it a lot more so thank you for the suggestion.  Done

Background and release

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• Provide a link to the article for the album Olivia since it's the first mention of it in the article, minus the lead

 Done

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• "describing" --> "described"

 Done

• Great work, I must say!

• Thank you!

Reception

Critical response

• Are there are many reviews out there? This section is quite small for a GA

• I have added a little more. I found a negative review so I changed some of the above sentences on the feedback to match the new sources. Let me know if you think more should be added. Aoba47 (talk) 05:48, 29 May 2016 (UTC)

Charts

• Use the correct template for single charts; use this link to help out: Template:Single chart

• I am having issues with the template for single charts. I think it is because Billboard's records on Olivia's songs is very weird. While you can go back into the archive of the Billboard Hot 100 to find the single placement is in fact correct, it is not listed on her page. Also, the biography on Olivia's page refers to a completely different singer (a Japanese singer no less so completely wrong nationality). I am not entirely sure what to do from here so I would appreciate your input. Aoba47 (talk) 06:08, 29 May 2016 (UTC)

• Thank you for helping me with this section! Aoba47 (talk) 23:51, 29 May 2016 (UTC)

• The Canadian Hot 100 did not exist in 2001, I believe you meant the Canadian Singles Chart?

• Sorry for the silly mistake.  Done

External links

• Please add "Debut singles" to the list of categories

 Done

End of GA Review:

Great article throughout, but I hope you are able to further expand the reception aspect of the article. I'll place it on hold for seven days! Great work once again, Carbrera (talk) 04:51, 29 May 2016 (UTC).

• @Carbrera: Thank you for your review! I have addressed all of your comments, except for two. It might take me a couple days to find my physical copy of this CD so I can refer to the liner notes and update when and where the song was recorded (I will also do a massive overhaul to the "Credits" section). I should have that done by the middle of the week if that is okay. Also, I am having some issues with fixing the charts and would like your advice on that. Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 06:08, 29 May 2016 (UTC)

• @Aoba47: Definitely looks better! I'll be passing it now! Congrats! Carbrera (talk) 00:01, 30 May 2016 (UTC)

• Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 00:11, 30 May 2016 (UTC)