Talk:Bear Came Along/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Eddie891 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 23:34, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
Hi I'll review this over the week to come. Some of my comments might be prose things not needed for GA status, so don't feel like you have to take action on every one. Eddie891 Talk Work 23:34, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
- Sourcing
- What makes Mr. Schu Reads a reliable source?
- All other sources seem reliable for what they're being used for
- Prose
- What does "gouache" mean?
- "Unusually after reading the manuscript, illustrator LeUyen Pham immediately knew what the finished book would " Given that it's entirely possible this is an exaggeration, could you maybe consider something like "in an interview, illustrator LeUyen Pham said that she knew what the finished book would look like immediately after reading the manuscript and she eagerly accepted the commission" or something?
- Done
- "Pham loved the spare text " what is spare text?
- "was "so unexpected from [Morris]"." what does this quote tell us? Did she know morris and didn't expect it? Was it unexpected from an author in general? Something else?
- I removed most of the commas before quotes per MOS:"-- sentence fragments shouldn't have commas, and none of them need them. Feel free to rv if you desire.
- "Several design elements also contribute to the book. " does this add any value?
- "A river doesn't know what it is" I'm not quite sure what this means to be honest
- I've copyedited as well. Please check that my changes are agreeable to you. Suggestions all, don't feel obligated to action them. Eddie891 Talk Work 00:11, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
- Spotcheck
- You should probably note that CSM's review is 4/5 stars-- some reviews are just 4
- Done
- Citations for "Danielson in her in her review for The Horn Book Magazine praised the character's journey, as did Kirkus Reviews in its starred review." seem to be mixed up
- I've checked the vast majority of sourcing, it all lines up well. On a side note, LeUyen Pham is a surprisingly interesting person to listen to speaking.
- comprehensiveness
- I checked several databases and google and found no major sources that seem worth adding
- IR