Talk:Ashley Freiberg/GA1
Latest comment: 4 years ago by Harrias in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Harrias (talk · contribs) 09:12, 7 May 2020 (UTC)
I'll take a look at this one.
Three things that jump out at me before conducting a proper review:
- The article seems to finish in 2018; is there any information on what she has done since?
- Any chance of any pictures? Even if it is just of cars in one of the series she competed in, for some visual context?
- File:-96 Turner Motorsports BMW M6 GTD (25923112306).jpg Could be used. Harrias talk 08:39, 18 May 2020 (UTC)
- Articles by Forbes "contributors" are not considered reliable, and should be removed per WP:RS/P (ref #2). Harrias talk 09:12, 7 May 2020 (UTC)
- References
- Ref #10 and #45, "Motorsport Stats" is the website, not the publisher.
- Ref #15, what makes "Speedsport Magazine" a reliable source?
- Ref #22, #27, #35 and #38, "SportsCar365" is the website, "John Dagys Media" is the publisher.
- Ref #23, #34 and #43, our article capitalises "Motorsport.com".
- Ref #32, "Racing-Reference" is the website, not the publisher.
- Ref #39, any chance of a translated title?
- Biography
- Could you move the Personal life section to the top, given it mostly includes information that chronologically goes there? When I read that her father took her to Ventura, California, I wanted to know how close to home that was, but I had to go all the way to the bottom to find out where she was from.
- "..after playing basketball, skateboarding, soccer and studying karate.." I'm not keen on the construction here, because "playing skateboarding" seems odd to me. How about "..after skateboarding, playing basketball and soccer, and studying karate.."?
- Expand "Jr Sprint" to "Junior Sprint".
- Are the "Skip Barber National Championship" and the "Skip Barber National Series" different things? This confused me a little.
- Remove duplicate link to Autobahn Country Club.
- "..to brake the tie with Snow for the championship lead.." Two points. First: "break", not "brake". Second: which Snow, Madison or Melanie?
Overall, not much wrong with this at all. Nice work. Harrias talk 08:39, 18 May 2020 (UTC)