Talk:Ach wie flüchtig, ach wie nichtig, BWV 26/GA1

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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 11:54, 31 December 2015 (UTC)Reply


Lede
  • "Its aspect of the transience of human life " -can you reword a bit, it's not clear what you mean. Theme rather than aspect?
"theme" tried --GA
History
  • As we know its 1724 you can remove "of 1724" in second instance.
yes --GA
  • "The cantata is based on the hymn in 13 stanzas by Michael Franck (1652)[4] on a melody by Johann Crüger (1661),[" -"to" rather than "on" a melody. Comma after Franck needed too.
yes --GA
  • "kept" -retained?
yes, more later --Gerda Arendt (talk) 14:22, 31 December 2015 (UTC)Reply
Scoring
  • "The text and tune of the hymn are kept" -kept isn't the right word here.
tried differently --GA
  • As you've linked the instruments here you should probably do so in the lede too, or don't link them, either one.
This has grown in history. To link to violin is nonsense in a way, as the kind of violin Bach knew sounded different from what our article is focused on. Most people will know what a tenor is. I retained that from the earlier versions, but find it distracting in the lead, where you have a link to Baroque instruments, same as in the infobox for "instrumental". --Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:39, 31 December 2015 (UTC)Reply
Music
  • "The Bach scholar Klaus Hofmann notes: "A " -I would tweak to "The Bach scholar Klaus Hoffman describes it as a "far-reaching coloratura [which] culminates in an uneasy dissonance" to improve flow.
taken --GA
  • ""unusual oboe trio"" -unusual according to whom?
ref doubled --GA
  • " Mincham sees a connection of the runs to those of movement 1, but" -strange to end the line with "but" and then the block quote. I would find a way to shorten it and paraphrase inline.
I added, but find the description too good to paraphrase ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:39, 31 December 2015 (UTC)Reply
Delighted that you look into this, and hoping that some of our past disagreements will prove fleeting and futile: I will get to this, but have family first, --Gerda Arendt (talk) 13:52, 31 December 2015 (UTC)Reply


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Excellent job!♦ Dr. Blofeld 16:46, 31 December 2015 (UTC)Reply