Talk:ADHOC

Latest comment: 3 years ago by ToBeFree in topic Neutral point of view

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If anyone is able to find more information on this organization, please post it here, and I will add it to the article.Redian(Talk) 22:21, 30 March 2007 (UTC)Reply

More information than you could possibly use is here - http://www.adhoc-chra.org/ Cheers, Paxse 19:20, 5 July 2007 (UTC)Reply
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Neutral point of view

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The article is not written from a neutral point of view; see Special:Permalink/1016272472 and Special:Permalink/1016272494 for two revisions that look like a marketing catalogue, with bold formatting incorrectly used for emphasis (do not use boldfacing for emphasis). The current revision (Special:Permalink/1016437024) is still not neutral.

The lack of neutrality starts with the headings: "Vision, mission and activities" are an appropriate heading for the organization's website, but not a neutral encyclopedia. I propose to split these into "History", "Facilities" and "Activities"; there's no encyclopedic need to focus on a "vision". We should describe neutrally what the organization does, not what it intends to do.

The content focuses on awards, even in the lead section (Special:Diff/1016277140, Special:Permalink/1016437024), which inserts unduly weighted material into a section reserved for a summary of its most important contents. I would like to reduce this undue focus and remove the praising awards paragraph from the lead section.

Statements such as "ADHOC's commitment and ground-breaking work has long been recognized" and "This broad reach underpins" are not neutral; they subjectively judge the article subject. A lack of reliable inline citations especially at Special:Permalink/1016272494, and a lack of independent secondary sources, made me challenge some of the statements; they should not reappear in the article without a proper citation (WP:BURDEN). For example, I'd like to see a reliable independent source that directly supports the sentence "ADHOC's commitment and ground-breaking work has long been recognized". Before such a source is provided, we don't even need to discuss the neutrality of the sentence; it simply lacks verifiability.

Large sub-headings like "Community empowerment" and "Assistance to victims" are not neutral; they push positive terms like "empowerment" and "assistance" into the reader's mind with an emphasis even stronger than boldfaced text.

I propose to restore Special:Permalink/1016277551, as it fixes most of these problems. ~ ToBeFree (talk) 03:20, 10 April 2021 (UTC)Reply

@AFB22: I've asked twice that you please discuss this matter. I'm going to go ahead and restore the change I've described above. If you revert without responding here, then I'm going to have to file a complaint against you at Wikipedia:AN3 for disruptive editing and edit warring by reverting without discussing. ~ ToBeFree (talk) 00:08, 26 April 2021 (UTC)Reply
"ADHOC monitors, investigates and intervenes in cases, carrying out fact-finding, offering legal advice as well as repatriation and basic assistance to victims of human rights, land rights and women and children's rights violations. ADHOC carries out advocacy between communities, victims and authorities to enable rights holders to have their voices heard at the decision-making level while demanding respect for human rights at the regional and international level. ADHOC implements community empowerment activities through capacity building trainings." – A) Please provide a reliable source, ideally an independent secondary one, that directly supports the contribution. See WP:BURDEN and WP:PSTS for details. B) Wikipedia articles are not a marketing catalogue, and this reads like a marketing catalogue entry, violating WP:NPOV.
Special:Diff/1021149736 re-uses an existing citation for adding text about a (presumably living) person. This would be fine if the citation actually contained the information, but bigpond.com.kh is offline both from here in Germany and the US-based Internet Archive servers. So I have to assume that the content is added from personal experience or otherwise coming from a non-published source. This probably does not meet Wikipedia's verifiability requirements. ~ ToBeFree (talk) 22:16, 8 May 2021 (UTC)Reply