Talk:2021 West Coast Eagles women's season

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 22:13, 13 November 2021 (UTC)

I'll be taking at this! — GhostRiver 22:13, 13 November 2021 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

• Good

Background

• "2020 was their first year in the AFL Women's competition." → "They began playing in the AFL Women's league during the 2020 season."
• "mens' team" → "men's team"
• "continued on being"

Playing list

• "a trade that involves West Coast" → "a trade that involved West Coast"
• Link 2020 AFL Women's draft in the second paragraph and delink in the third
  • Which exact phrase do you think should be linked? Steelkamp (talk) 06:32, 14 November 2021 (UTC)
• Mixed sentence tense in the sentence beginning "If players were undrafted"

Season summary

• Quite long without subheads; maybe break up by month like baseball season GAs?
  • I broke it up by rounds. Steelkamp (talk) 06:32, 14 November 2021 (UTC)
• "The fixture was revealed on 11 December 2020, however it changed several times after that due to restrictions and border closures caused by the COVID-19 pandemic" → "The planned fixture was revealed on 11 December 2020; continued restrictions and border closures caused by the COVID-19 pandemic, however, forced it to change several times"
• The way it's currently set up, "reigning premiers" feels a bit WP:EASTEREGGy to me; should mention earlier that Adelaide are the reigning champs
• "for West Coast. Brianna" → "for West Coast, but three players suffered injuries:"
• "This meant that" I'm a little confused about what "this" is supposed to mean; is it because it's a Western Derby?
• "because a knife fell off" → "when a knife fell off"
• Missing period after "four outs for round 2"
• "wasn't considered too bad" → "was not considered a total failure"
• "Parris Laurie and Andrea Gilmore played, after their injuries ended up not being serious" → "Parris Laurie and Andrea Gilmore's injuries were minor enough to allow them to return"
• was also due to play her first game back from her knee injury, but was a late out due to her knee repetitive phrasing
• I'm assuming "Grace Kelly" should be targeted towards Grace Kelly (footballer) and not the princess it currently links to

Awards

• "Mikayla Bowen was named" → "Bowen was also named"

References

• Good!

General comments

• Images are properly licensed and relevant
• Images should be moved slightly to avoid MOS:SANDWICH issues
• Per MOS:CAPTION, the captions, as full sentences, should end in periods
• No stability concerns in the revision history
• Copyvio score looks great at 7.4%

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. Please feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're finished! — GhostRiver 22:58, 13 November 2021 (UTC)

I have done all changes bar one. See my comment above. Steelkamp (talk) 06:32, 14 November 2021 (UTC)

I've made the last change myself. Passing now — GhostRiver 16:19, 14 November 2021 (UTC)