Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Guild of Copy Editors/Blitzes/October 2022

Chitra Sarwara

Hello, can someone please review my edits to this article. It's my first time and I feel like I may have done something wrong. The article still has many areas of improvements like citations. Would they fall under the copyediting purview? DoublePendulumAttractor (talk) 23:24, 18 October 2022 (UTC)

I looked at what you've done and saw many improvements being made. However, I would not use "corporator", which re-directs to "councillor", which is a much more usual term.

I saw citations that didn't give much information, but at least used standard templates. I didn't see error messages being generated, which is something I sometimes fix. It's often a part of copy editing that you will want to review sources, find the citations wanting somehow (e.g. dead links), and will want to fix them, having found, say, an archive link or how the website has been reorganized or a better reference, and where it doesn't take much more effort to set things right. Beyond that, it isn't the copy editor's job to make sure that the article has appropriate referencing. Dhtwiki (talk) 04:20, 19 October 2022 (UTC)

Kumbhakarna

Hello, I am posting to request a GOCE coordinator to review my copy editing work on the Kumbhakarna page. I am new to copy editing and this is the first blitz that I am participating in. I used the [to/Step by step guide] and [copyediting] resources to guide myself through copy editing efforts. I believe I have implemented the necessary changes, but would like feedback on anything I may have missed, or guidance on how this article can be improved from a copy editing perspective.

The page also has the following tags: This article or section may fail to make a clear distinction between fact and fiction. (January 2022) & This article needs additional citations for verification. (January 2022). I am not sure if addressing these tags is under the purview of copy editors, but it certainly made this a difficult page to copy edit. I'd be happy to work on the article to remove these tags after the blitz is finished if it is outside of our scope.

Looking forward to receiving feedback! Jadedhippo (talk) 18:56, 19 October 2022 (UTC)

Welcome, and thanks for your help! Your edits look good in a quick look. One thing, though: in the lead sentence, you changed "is" to "was". "Is" is correct in this case, since it describes a fictional character. We can address the fact-fiction blur with copyediting, but providing additional references is beyond our scope. Have fun and all the best, Miniapolis 13:24, 20 October 2022 (UTC)

Thanks for your feedback, @Miniapolis! I'll make the adjustment in the lead sentence, and keep that in mind going forward. Have I sufficiently addressed the fact-fiction blur, or are more copy edits necessary? If no more copy edits are required, I'll remove the tag and mark this article as completed. Again, thank you! Jadedhippo (talk) 16:12, 20 October 2022 (UTC)

The "In the war" section could use a few more tweaks. The prose should be more encyclopedic; for example, "A long drawn out duel ensued between Lakshmana and Kumbhakarna, after which both combatants were fatigued" → "Lakshmana and Kumbhakarna dueled for a long time, exhausting them both". Apart from that, it looks good (again, at a glance; I'm working on Eunuchs in China, and hope to finish by the end of the blitz ). All the best, Miniapolis 19:22, 20 October 2022 (UTC)

Thanks for reviewing, @Miniapolis! Looking forward to the drive in November! Jadedhippo (talk) 04:27, 22 October 2022 (UTC)