Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/Spaghetti House siege/archive1

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Any comments or changes for this suggested TFA blurb? - Dank (push to talk) 16:57, 31 January 2019 (UTC)Reply

Pinging SchroCat: sorry, I'm an idiot, taking another stab at this one. - Dank (push to talk) 14:50, 24 March 2019 (UTC)Reply
Hi Dan A couple of changes. Has my addition put it over the word or character limit? Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 15:05, 24 March 2019 (UTC)Reply
Length is fine. The first tweak is fine. I'm not comfortable with "they said that it was a political action concerning black liberation". Your article is careful to give extensive context ... we have no room at all for context in the blurb, and there lots of ways to misread and misinterpret it. - Dank (push to talk) 15:11, 24 March 2019 (UTC)Reply
True - good point. I've taken it out for now, and think on if there is a better way, but very possibly not, given the amount of words needed to give it the right balance. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 15:19, 24 March 2019 (UTC)Reply
Thanks much. - Dank (push to talk) 15:21, 24 March 2019 (UTC)Reply

In the Spaghetti House siege, an attempted robbery of the Spaghetti House restaurant on 28 September 1975 in Knightsbridge, London, three men barricaded themselves and the staff in a storeroom. The ringleader was Franklin Davies, a 28-year-old Nigerian student who had previously served time in prison for armed robbery. The hostages were released unharmed after six days. Two of the gunmen gave themselves up, and Davies shot himself in the stomach. All three were later imprisoned, as was one of their accomplices. The police used fibre optic camera technology for live surveillance, and monitored the actions and conversations of the gunmen. The feed was watched by a forensic psychologist who advised police on the state of the men's minds, and how to best manage the ongoing negotiations. The 1976 play A Hole in Babylon and the 1982 Italian comedy film Spaghetti House were loosely based on the events of the siege.