Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Peer review/Nintendo DSi

Nintendo DSi edit

Mainly looking for comments for overall improvement, including those on structure and prose. « ₣M₣ » 16:20, 7 April 2010 (UTC)

Did you mean "As seventh-generation console, it primarily shares .." (in lead)?
- The best wording, actually, would be "As a seventh-..." Tezero (talk) 01:32, 20 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"However, speaking about the console's in-company unveiling in October 2007, Kuwahara said..." would read better as "However, at the console's in-company unveiling in October 2007, Kuwahara said...".

It seems that "The lower-case "i" character in "DSi" is symbolic.." sentence does not fit well in Demographic and sales; but I cannot quite think of where it would be more suited, except may be lead.

I think de-commatizing "It has two TFT-LCD screens, which, at 82.5 millimetres (3.25 in), are larger than the 76.2 millimetres (3.00 in) screens of previous models." to "It has two 82.5 millimetre (3.25 in) TFT-LCD screens, which are larger than the 76.2 millimetres (3.00 in) screens of previous models." would be better.

In "Technical specifications", components should probably not be in boldface.

Would "Larger model" section rather be called "Nintendo DSi XL" and prose say "A larger version of DSi, named Nintendo DSi XL (Nintendo DSi LL in Japan), was announced" or similar?

Would "Internet" section be better named "Internet connectivity" or similar, to indicate that the feature is the connectivity, not the whole internet?

Perhaps "..while others are priced 200, 500 or 800+ Nintendo Points—$2, $5 or $8+." should read "..while others are priced 200, 500 or 800+ Nintendo Points—costing $2, $5 or $8+ respectively." to indicate cleared connection. — H3llkn0wz ▎talk 17:15, 7 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Section name as is to comply with MOS mandate that articles not have their titles repeated by sections. If anyone wants to review, feel free as this much as changed since the above review. « ₣M₣ » 22:27, 19 May 2010 (UTC)