Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Peer review/Heli Attack 3

Heli Attack 3 edit

Firstly, the reason why I decided to work on this article is that, purely and simply, I love this game! On and off for the past month or so, I've taken the article under my wing and plonked it on my userspace, rewritten it from the ground up, and done everything that I can think of to improve it; I'm hopeful that, with enough work, Heli Attack 3 can be a GA.

What I would really like now is for a fresh pair of eyes to read this article through and advise me as to what else to do. In particular, I would really appreciate some comments on the quality of my sourcing - that's both the sources themselves and also whether there are any other major elements of the article which require them. Obviously any other comments and suggestions will be warmly received. :-)

Many thanks in advance, CountdownCrispy 23:15, 30 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! Here are concerns that I'm seeing about this page:

Why are there sections covering Heli Attack 1 and 2 on this page? If anything, they belong on a "Heli Attack series" page.
The level of detail in the weapons definitely encroaches on being considered "game-guide material", which many use to justify for deletion and failing GA/FA, as part of WP:NOT. It probably needs to be condensed into prose. The same goes for the Enemies section. You should probably cut out anything too specific, like information on Hit Points, or Zones for each enemy.
Zones and Time powers sections should be condensed and/or de-listified.

--SevereTireDamage 03:25, 7 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Hey there SevereTireDamage - what a great username! I've responded to your requests and made several changes to the article:

Moving the History section to a separate article, Heli Attack (series).
I've removed the hit points and reload times for the weapons but have left them in a (rather odd looking :-S) table for now - I honestly don't think that condensing it to prose will render it as clear and easy to view. If you can suggest a way in which to reduce the number of weapons displayed I'll be happy to see what further changes I can make.
I've de-listified Enemies, Zones and Time powers and made changed where necessary to make them fit the new style.

As I say, if anyone else has further suggestions they will be happily received as I improve the article.

Regards, CountdownCrispy ^{( ?} 01:09, 18 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]