Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Peer review/Delta Force: Land Warrior

Delta Force: Land Warrior edit

I feel this article is nearly complete and a peer review would be a good way to polish it and finish it off. Main issues are formatting and a few details. Others may find more to deal with. – Lunarbunny 20:41, 31 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Um, to add on – I don't know if Wes Eckhart is correct and I do not know the engine. – Lunarbunny 20:43, 31 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Some things to keep in mind, some of which I have fixed:

If you don't know one of the info for the infobox, don't put a ? there, leave it blank and the template will take care of it.
The lead section does not have its own heading (you gave it a "summary" heading).
Do not write as if the reader was playing the game. This means:
- Avoid use of "you" and "your"
- Avoid comments as to how to play; comments like "The best idea is not to count on him" have no real relevence here. Phrases like "fire button must be held down" are right out.
The "Groups and organizations" section can be neatly turned into prose and put into the storyline/premise section.
The list of weapons does not seem to serve any particular purpose; I am generally opposed to such lists.
As with all articles, do some research and find some reliable sources that talk about the game; reviews, interviews, magazine and website features, etc, are all good places to find information about the game as a real-world entity; that is, of interest to people who are not playing it. Subjective statements (such as the "bad AI") need to be cited; find someone who said it, and point at their words.

That's all I can say at the moment. Hope that helps. Nifboy 07:47, 11 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Still working on my style here, and a peer review is just what I need to see what to do differently. As for bad AI, I guess that comment currently falls under "original research" if I can't find a source...

The weapon list was created as I have seen multiple first-person shooter articles list every single weapon available to the player.

All in all, I just want to see what this looks like at the end. – Lunarbunny 00:15, 12 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]