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Article promoted Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:32, 8 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

William McAloney

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Nominator(s): Abraham, B.S. (talk)


I am nominating this article for A-Class review because I have substantially expanded it recently and believe it now meets the A-Class criteria. A career aero fitter and engineering officer in the Royal Australian Air Force, McAloney's primary claim to fame comes from a single action on 31 August 1937. During a training exercise, an aircraft crashed on take off and McAloney ran into the flaming wreckage in an effort to rescue the pilot. His efforts ultimately proved unsuccessful, but he was nonetheless awarded the Albert Medal for his actions. In 1971 he exchanged his Albert Medal for the George Cross. The article has just passed as GA, and I welcome any and all comments. Thanks! Abraham, B.S. (talk) 08:29, 19 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Support -- just passed as GA, having reviewed coverage, referencing, structure, prose and supporting materials with an eye on A/FA standards as well, and hardly found the article wanting for those. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 08:44, 19 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

As always, thanks very much for the review and tweaks Ian. :) Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 08:54, 19 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Support: not much that I could see wrong with this. I only have the one suggestion:

  • Ref 26 could possibly be replaced with a dead tree source if you are keen. Horner & Bou 2008, p. 439 provides the following dates in relation to the son's tenure as CO 1 RAR: "14 Aug 1984 - 14 Dec 1986". The full details of the source are: {{cite book |last1=Horner |first1=David |last2=Bou |first2=Jean |year=2008 |title=Duty First: A History of the Royal Australian Regiment |edition=2nd |publisher=Allen & Unwin |location=Crows Nest, New South Wales |isbn=978-1-74175-374-5}}. Anyway, good work. Cheers, AustralianRupert (talk) 12:12, 6 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Many thanks for the review (and typo fixes!), Rupert. :) I actually have a copy of that book, but never thought to check it for this. Will add the dead tree source in now. Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 02:47, 7 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments A well written and informative article. The only issues that I noted was:

  • "...the coroner publically commended..." Is it publically or publicly?
  • "In 1971, owing to the decline in status and significance of the Albert Medal, the British Government announced that living recipients of the decoration would be invited to exchange their medals for the George Cross, and would henceforth formally become recipients of the latter award." The word "would" is repeated in close succession. I think you could delete the second usage and it would not affect the readability of the sentence.

Cheers. Zawed (talk) 08:10, 7 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks for the review, Zawed. :) Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 08:27, 7 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Have added my support now. Zawed (talk) 08:54, 7 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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