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Spanish battleship Alfonso XIII edit

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Spanish battleship Alfonso XIII (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

Nobody expects the Spanish Inqui... a Spanish warship at A-class review! Alfonso XIII, later renamed España, was one of three dreadnought battleships built for the Spanish Navy in the early 1910s. She had a fairly interesting career, ending up in the Nationalist fleet during the Spanish Civil War and ultimately being accidentally sunk by a Nationalist mine. Thanks to all who take the time to review the article. Parsecboy (talk) 15:49, 10 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Support from Nick-D edit

Support It's good to see a change from the usual focus on the main battleship fleets. I think that the A-class criteria are met, but would like to offer the following comments to assist with FAC preperations:

Believe me, it can get boring writing about the same couple of fleets over and over - if I had the sources, I'd do more with minor navies, but they're generally poorly documented, and Ed went and did the South American battleships! Luckily, I was able to get all three of the Spanish battleships into good shape, so we can have a change of pace every now and then.
  • "The ship's landing party went ashore to guard a rail line and several mines and in a clash with revolutionaries, one man from the ship's crew was killed and several were injured, while twenty-two revolutionaries were arrested and held aboard the ship." - I'd suggest splitting this into two sentences
    • Good idea
  • "Alfonso XIII again helped to suppress revolutionary activities" - was this a revolution? The stub on the strike note that it led to the adoption of an eight hour day in Spain, which is far from a radical reform (not sure what the history is, but there's a risk here of accidentally legitimising attempts to use the armed forces to suppress trade union/workers rights activities) Nick-D (talk) 10:52, 12 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    • I don't know exactly, either - the passage characterizes the 1917 strike as one "with pronounced revolutionary overtones", but the 1919 strike simply as "another outburst of industrial unrest". Given what I do know about the political situation in Spain in the early 20th century, I don't know that it'd be unreasonable to think the latter strike had a similar segment of revolutionaries involved, but it might be safer to just say "...helped to suppress striking workers in early 1919..." Thanks Nick. Parsecboy (talk) 12:47, 12 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

CommentsSupport by CPA-5 edit

  • The engines were rated at 15,500 shaft horsepower (11,600 kW) Link kW.
    • Done
  • Maybe in the body too? Also link knots and calibre in the infobox too. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 16:02, 2 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Done
  • Where's the weight of the ship in the body?
    • Whoops, good catch! (I've added it to the others too)
  • superfiring turrets, as was done in the South Carolinas Mention here that the South Carolinas battleships were.
    • Good idea
  • After Italy, a member of the Triple Alliance, declared neutrality Pipe Italy to the Kingdom of Italy.
    • Done
  • King Alfonso XIII was aboard his yacht Giralda No link for Giralda?
    • No, unfortunately
  • United States and commissioned into the US Navy Link US Navy.
    • Done
  • the ship visited Lisbon, Portugal during ceremonies held to commemorate the country's soldiers who had been killed during World War I What did she do between the Rif War and this event?
    • Nothing - Rodríguez González doesn't mention anything, and as far as I can tell, the operations before July 1921 were limited to the Spanish Army
  • advocated rebuilding the ships into analogues to the German Deutschland-class cruisers British analogues?
    • No, they'd have remained Spanish
  • No I mean, shouldn't it be analog?
  • Both variants are commonly used in the US (to my mind, I'd use "analog" for a clock but "analogue" in this context, but that might just be my own idiosyncrasy)
  • @Parsecboy: By Ngram analog is more popular rather than analogue. However Merriam-Webster you know the biggest (and oldest) American dictionary says it's "chiefly British spelling of ANALOG" so I believe it's fine but to be sure because should we not use only the most common term in an English dialect?
  • After a brief period of uncertainty, Lieutenant Commander Gabriel Rozas Link both Gabriel Rozas and lieutenant itself.
    • Linked the rank, but I don't know that he's notable
  • operational, and she carried only twelve of her 4-inch guns Imperial unit here while the rest of the article uses metric?
    • Fixed
  • Link Royal Navy.
    • Done

That's anything from me. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 17:01, 1 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks CPA. Parsecboy (talk) 15:27, 2 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Update: I don't really have the time to continue this. 'Cause of our lockdown, school and real life issues I won't be that much online for a week or longer. :/ Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 22:33, 17 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Source review - pass edit

G'day, looks pretty good to me from a sourcing perspective. I have a few minor comments: AustralianRupert (talk) 04:04, 7 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • suggest adding hyphens to he ISBN for the Fernández work for consistency
    • Done
  • suggest adding a translation for the title of the Moreno work
    • Done - but I'd be happy for a Spanish speaker to check Google Translate's work
  • publisher and location for the Moreno work?
    • Done
  • page range for Rodriguez's chapter in Taylor?
    • Added
  • probably don't need "Ltd" for the Gibbons and Lyon works in the Further reading section
    • Removed
  • endash for the title of the Gardiner work?
    • Done
  • add "|language=Spanish" for the Moreno source?
    • Done
  • there are no dup links or dab links (no action required)
  • the citations appear to be consistently formatted (no action required)
  • English language sources seem reliable to me based on authors, publishers and/or citations from other reliable sources; AGF on non-English language sources (no action required)
  • suggest adding alt text to the images: [1]
  • nothing much showed up in terms of additional sources that I could see based on my Google Books search (although for FAC, it may pay to consult a broader database, of course)
Thanks AR. Parsecboy (talk) 10:42, 7 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Image review - pass edit

"File:Frente del Norte - Spanish Civil War (March-Sept 1937).svg" needs a source. Ie the book, article or map from which the information in the image is drawn.

Gog the Mild (talk) 18:10, 12 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Added the source used per the uploader. Thanks Gog. Parsecboy (talk) 16:38, 25 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

CommentsSupport by PM edit

A nice change, and the Spanish Civil War stuff is interesting. I know how hard minor navies can be... A few comments:

  • suggest "she received major damage when she accidentally struck a mine that had been laid by a Nationalist minelayer."
    • Yeah, that sounds better
  • "awarded to the Spanish firm Spanish"
    • Whoops!
  • the deck armor conversion doesn't match between infobox and body
    • Fixed
  • suggest "The destroyer Velasco also defected to the Nationalist coupside"
    • Done
  • no idea of the tonnage of SS Mar Báltico?
    • @DagosNavy: added that line back in 2010, maybe he can answer that for us?
  • "AtBy around 08:30, España's crew"
    • Done
  • duplication: "A fourth man died of his wounds aboard Velasco" and "A fourth man died while Velasco was en route to Ferrol"
    • Removed the second one

That's all I could find. Nice job. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:50, 26 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks PM. Parsecboy (talk) 14:47, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The tonnage is a very minor bit of detail, so supporting as is. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:26, 29 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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